by writerannabelle
WOW, still awesome story. Great imagination, very complex strings to attach - nothing to make it better. It is, as it is - 5 stars. Thank you for this imaginationable fantasy trip to escape the boredom of plain mony-life. Thank you for publishing. At last i hope Mike learns to set rules and spank the shi^ out of Sofia and Tink for lying to him.
A fast paced isekai with lovable characters. Hmmm, 😍 I love it.
Every chapter takes us further into the life labyrinth 🐉😎🧙🏼🧙🏽♂️
Thanks, Annabelle 🌹
Wow, those people are relentless. What is Mike going to do. I think Lily is the succubus.
The following sentence should say Zel instead of Lily: "He had never been on a horse before, and he didn't know the protocol for mounting a centaur, but Lily knelt and impatiently yanked him onto her back."
Need a way to edit comments on here.
Forgot to add that Mike needs some sort of powers gifted to him so he can rotect himself, he has more than earned some reward...
As my late father used to say, "The plot doth thicken"...
More twist and turns to this and I'm getting confused... LOL
😲 What will happen to Beth? Can Mike get to Tink and company to battle the minotaur? Will Zel and Naia come up with some brilliant ploy? Read on to find out....
Ah hell! Why does Beth keep getting the shitty end of the stick. I was hoping she and that bad ol Lily would take a tumble😋. Love that titty fuck our hero Mike got. Hopefully that will charge him up for the serious fuckery coming his way.
Still a five star story, but unfortunately the proofreading and editing are becoming a little lax.
This chapter was a good read but somehow not as satisfying. The only chapter so far that I could only give 4 stars. Now onto what will be another 5 star one.
Bill S.
Ok I've been reading your fantastic story. I ❤️ how everything is fitting together like a billion pieces of a puzzle. I'm going to predict the female 1/2 horse and 1/2 woman & the newly freed succubus will play a key role. But only time will tell.
Noooo, not Beth she's supposed to end up being with Mike. And the others residents. Bring her back (real her) quickly
Love how Mike has no adversity to taking it up the butt. Will he eventually suck a cock?
This is one that you don't want to miss great story reading it for the third time keep up the great work looking forward to more from the north pole thanks again JAY
Awww, helpful Lily,
lots of great material in a short space.
I'm not even upset about the dragon's breath contrivance, because it's GOOD contrivance.
On reread, one thing caught my attention, Cecilia mentions that Tink used to activate the house defenses when Emily wasn't home, but I seem to recall this is something only the caretaker can do.
Maybe I'll come across the answer in due time, having a lot of fun giving it a second read.
I'm super far behind and just started reading these. You probably don't read comments on the old ones anymore but I wanted you to know how much I'm loving it. Few works of literature have made me care for or hate characters like yours has. The story is absolutely amazing. Admittedly, I found your work because I had looked up erotica for a specific creature... Secret fantasy of mine. Then I saw the part numbers and knew the whole story would be worth my time
“Not a tear had been spared…” It seems like you’re trying to say the kids didn’t cry for their deceased father, which would be “Not a tear was shed…”. As it’s written this means there was a lot of crying.
It’s like in an earlier chapter you wrote that someone “could care less about” something when it should have been “couldn’t care less”. The meaning is opposite to what was intended.
You also mentioned flags at the top of the buttresses but that should have been “turrets” which are the little towers, while buttresses are short walls that stick out sideways from the main wall to support them. Often seen on old stone churches and cathedrals. Sometimes they are “flying”.
“One hundred and forty six” was the best line in the whole series so far though.
You write the bad guys so well. I hate them all for messing with innocents
Bravo
Few authors get me invested in characters like this.
Fewer still get a second read through
I hope that mike saves beth and bangs her senceless, but also he needs to get some education about the magic and starting to fight back...
Thank you for your work! That's quite spooky, huh. Idk what you would call that, a doppelganger, I guess? Hm
There's a lot going on but it's fun to read. BTW I have to agree with some of the comments others made. Maybe you should get an editor to proof your stuff the typos are a bit annoying! Still it's a good story and I'll continue to read it!
A truly excellent series but I agree with others, the sex doesn't add much.
I really hate to do it here, because I have to admit I haven't tabulated all of this. But I notice from time to time a couple errors. "He" vs "She" for instance. At one point you called Zel "Lily" instead. I THINK last chapter for that one?
Ultimately not a bother. Trust me I've self-corrected far worse. Still fantastic. Sadly still skipping the sex because I give two craps about it vs the story.
I am completely enthralled in this story! I've been reading at every opportunity for the past two days... I'm exhausted and can't stop. Your plot development, characters and amazing world are so fun and entraining! Just the right balance of humor, mystery, action, love, and sex. It's fantastic! Thank you so much for sharing your work, it's a great read!!!
I'm loving your series. I'm tearing through the chapters. And there only bad thing about that is the experience I'd over easy too fast. Though I will read anything else you have written.
...great world-building, great character development...
One thing...and it is apparently a favorite of women, and, on Literotica, women writers...
Guys don't like finger-in-anus NEARLY as much as women THINK they do.
It's like a thing writers here drop to seem edgy or cool or 'in', whatever, but sorry, every time I see it I'm pulled away from the scene. Even more so because THIS guy wasn't having ANY sex a week ago. Not even a passing thought of "Why is she back there? I'm not sure I'll like that..."
Yanks me right out of the moment wondering what he'd really say or do. Two can take fingers in there and he isn't walking funny or feeling off?
I get it is difficult to write across gender, and in general you have done an outstanding job. I'm also guessing this is long gone and even if you read this you could care less.
Only other thing I'd say is find an editor.
I know how it is to self-edit and you do a very good job there as well...but we all miss some and a few were rough.
Poor Beth csnt catch a fucking break. I'm big on redemption so I hope we see a lot more of Lily.
Excellent work so far, absolutely binge worthy story.
Zel will save the day for Tink and Mike. Not sure what Sophia is up to. But will read and find out. I can't stop reading it Annabella hun. Your write is so imaginative and the way you link your character. The little steps, the vine and its metamorphism make me think at some stage it will come to mikes rescue with his offspring. Thanks for this work of genius.
Looks like the clock may be intelligent and Beth stepped in it(sorry couldn't resist). It's getting interesting and tense. Very nice setup.
I like Lily more and more! Beth is awesome, but I feel for her being caught up in this without any warning or understanding.
The obsessive side of me worries about the missing boxes!! Gah!
I like Zel. I feel for the outcast, loner. I'm glad she found a place!! I liked her scene. That slow, "innocent" build up really works for me. That's why I liked Tinks last scene so much. Though, I hope she gets full satisfaction at some point.
Sophia is making it hard for me to like her, but her character is still so new.
I really like the worlds within worlds. It gives you, the writer, and the store so much room to grow and expand!!!
The mandragora ate and digested Sarah but since it was weakened decided to just use her skeleton as a support structure to build the body of its progeny on to. It’s a plant so it doesn’t have anything like human mores or emotions. It was just being... practical. That’s why the new mandragora was still wearing the necklace. I thought this was brilliant and spooky and darkly morbid. Well done writerannabelle!
I still don't understand if a part of her lives inside the new plant body or if the man.. (I cant spell it xD) just stole her body. Becuase if part of her is still in there then how is she handling it. And if the plant just stole her body? It just freaks me out then
May you live forever and keep writing for your many friends and admirers. You are a true craftsman/woman/whatever (no matter), and deserving of good things in your life. Be well, and carry on!
1 of his first ideas would be to look for anything to defend the house and the beings surrounding it and inside of it.
EVE Online teaches players that 1st lesson asap. you loose you ship and you loose your ass, you loose the Game.
Mike ought to take some time (if he can catch a break) to learn some magic. I could see that helping greatly lol. Keep up the awesome work!
Mike spent his adolescence with a deranged mother, bumming spaces to sleep and dodging responsibilities. Now he's a klutzy drone, free of his mother but lacking social skills, common sense, and ... come to think of it, you're writing this like a season of anime episodes. You lost me the third time Mike smashed his nose.
Thanks for posting your efforts on Literotica.
This is somehow worse than waiting for an episode of Game of Thrones.... at least I know when GoT will drop. I've been binge reading this. Keep them coming!
I read all chapters in one day. What started as a quick horny adventure ended up with me reading these like a great novel. Please keep it up, I’m loving this world you’ve created.
Was really hoping we could have had a nice scene with the centaur getting a different type of long ride with Mike. I hope it happens in the later chapters, and maybe some more fun with Tink as well. Goblin girl and the centaur need some real loving.
Love the story line, characters, and the action! Kudos to you! I hope you keep exploring the magic and creatures of your world!
Characters popping out of the woodwork all over the place. Need a who's who to keep track of them all! Keep up the great writing, I hope the good guy wins!
Hope you finish it, because I want to finish reading it. Good luck!
Man, Beth can't get a break. I wonder who this dude is as the lady in white and the intern are from the society
Have you ever thought about patreon? You could be getting paid for these chapters. Good story, I dig it.
I found your story while waiting frustrated for the next episode of THREE SQUARE MEALS by TEFLER. I have so enjoyed your story of HFHM and am now again frustrated waiting for the next episode! So two stories of excellent writing and I am left wishing for updates.
You are telling a very believable tale that carries you along with plenty of side issues so you have to think hard which way it's going and I am enjoying the different types of people you have written in and the care you have taken to have different personalities each time with descriptions painting a believable picture of them.
I am looking forward to whoever is printed next knowing there is another episode of the other story soon to follow. I'm spoilt for choice.
Keep up the great writing, I like your story alot. Thank you so much, for your efforts
I really like the way all your monsters have distinct characters and sexual preferences
AGAIN! So here we sit, waiting impatiently for the next installment of your delicious story. Please- do hurry!
4 Stars yet another awesomely anticipated chapter. Can hardly wait for the next. I'm glad you're still writing. Not very many people stick around. Keep up the good work.
Your story is amazing,but may I ask a request, maybe in the next chapter kind of have a quick run down of what actually Lily did to get those papers n the key,just brief ,I kinda like situations were the women seduce or use sexual activity to get things done,n I hope you consider,like maybe lily thinking of what she did to the guy, just a though :)
I really, really hate you when you make cliff hangers like this. But I will admit that you have me love your work with a passion. This has captivated me from the beginning and you keep delivering. Congratulations on your publishing deal. I'll buy your work right out the gate. Next chapter please.
I just powered through every chapter from the beginning in one day. Love the characters, the scenes, and I live the detail put into how each monster is anatomically different. Can't wait to see what's next! I really can't wait for Lily, Beth, and Dana to all join the family.
Sabastien thinks he's taken care of Beth, but he doesn't know about her "intern." I think for Lily it's time for a Klingon proverb - revenge is a dish best served cold. Eagerly anticipating the the next exciting chapter of HFHM, same Lit channel, same writerannabelle time.
Is Mike a closet browncoat? I just realized WWMRD (What Would Malcolm Reynolds Do?) is the same if we swap in Mike Radley. I say, "Hmm."
Thanks for sharing! 5* Slainté
One of the best stories I have read keep it going
please and thank you outstanding work
Amazing build up can't wait to see what's going to happen. Looking forward too see what Mike is going to do, hope it's something good. Really wondering about Beth will it be like Alice or will she find her own monsters?
I'm constantly checking my favorites list to see if you've posted a new story. Makes my night when you do. Can't wait for the next!
FINALLY the next chapter, and its a teaser! Please hurry up with the next one.
Poor Beth. She just cant catch a break!
I love this series and can't get enough. Please keep them coming
First off, let me say that I don’t read a lot of erotica. Too much of it tends to be poorly written, an uninteresting story, just an excuse to write a violent rape fantasy or over-the-top, sickly-sweet romance. Imagine my surprise when I found *this* absolute gem of a series! Your story is engaging, the mythology you’ve created is interesting, your characters are compelling and have depth, it moves at a good pace and you don’t shy away from graphic sex scenes. I started chapter 1 last night during a slow period at work and am now fully caught up and eagerly awaiting chapter 17! Without too much gushing, I can honestly say I wouldn’t be disappointed had I paid to read this. Keep up the great work! You truly have a knack!
P.S.- I have a bit of a “fetish” for large penetrations so the finale between Lily and Mike (where his cock seemed to get bigger and bigger) was probably my favorite scene so far. Needless to say, I tend to imagine Mike as *much* larger than “nearly eight inches” ;)
I started to read this series with a very skeptical attitude, I mean monster girls are often a jumble of ideas but there was something that got me. I like that the girls so far do not conform to the main stream ideals of what is often taken as fact in the genealogy of monsters, though this is coming from someone that played Dungeons and Dragons before it became AD&D then later to DnD 2.0. I like that Tink is the way she is and her and the nymph are my favorite then there is the succubus, yet another being that is so often mainstreamed into some hypersexual being with close to no brains and wanting sex over living. I like there is thought put to this but my biggest two issues with the story is 1.) I WANT MORE!!! Lol I got hooked so meh love the work and thought 2.) the Gargoyle this may come from the time I bing watched the cartoon series but I subscribed to the idea that they were flesh and blood creatures until they slept or were near death in which they turned to stone or that they could will themselves to become flesh and blood
Either way I am looking forward to more of this story to continue and I am glad that I took a chance on it. Love the ideas in it despite what I wrote before well worth the five stars that I gave it
I look forward to seeing how this resolves itself. I can think of several ways, but we shall see.
Annabelle, the title of the comment says it in a nutshell. That said I agree with at least one other reader that short of a miracle, Mike will end up losing or paying to high a price to survive. Your character development and the plot detail is wonderful, the technical writing is a pleasure to read, but I really want to see less direct conflict with the society as the plot driver for a few chapters, and more of the challenges of learning about his new environment and the monsters in it as the plot focus. Regardless of my preference, THANK YOU for writing. Your style is engaging and the plot is fun!
I love this ongoing story and I gave it 5 stars like I always do. Mainly because it is fun and cool to see the main charater explore the house. My only gripe per say is the society they are just to powerfull in this story. Once they breach the geas mike is a goner hands down and if they capture beth and trade her for the house no way mike will be able to get the house back not even with the succubus helping him. It would of been nice to see mike explore all of the house and the holdings around the world then bring in the society so it would be somewhat of a even playing field. So now its like we wait for the society to win or mike wins but at a huge cost.
I love the story but you have two things happening at once it's like them comics bozooka candy wrappers that never finish.If you're going to have two things happen at once can you make the chapters longer or were you don't have to wait to long between chapters,I know I'm a pain in the neck but this is a good read but what ever just keep them coming
I can't really say what I want to about the way things are going. I would more than likely get people mad at me if I did. So all in all 3 1/2 stars. I'm sorry if that hurts your feelings Annabelle and if it pisses other readers off to I'm sorry.
Your writing is wonderful, fluid and original. I look forward to each new installment.
Keeps going in directions I didn't see coming. I want to find out What is going on with that clock.
Glad to see youre back! Some of the best writing Ive encountered on this site. Keep writing darlin! You've definitely have the gift!
I thought I had guessed where things were going to go but you have thrown (me and) the characters into the deep end and I have no idea who is going to survive the next chapter.
im not one for reading but this story is amazing i love every second of it, keeps you on the edge of your seat you could take out all the sexual stuff and still have a 100/10 novel with the sex and the way it ties to the story 1000/10 amazing work on everything here
I have been checking Literotica almost daily waiting for this chapter!
That being said, if Beth dies, there's a non-zero chance I might not be able to keep reading this series.
Hopefully the new intern comes to the rescue?
Guess I'll just have to wait and see!
I skip all parts not about Mike or one of the residents of the house. That makes all the recent chapters about 1.5 pages not 3, and this is still one of my favorite stories. I hope author pulls a Tefler and in another 2 years we will be on chapter 100 :)
Glad you're back! Looking forwards to the next instalment!! And maybe more centaur fun times. Zel is a good name, anything inspire you to choose it?
10/10