All Comments on 'Home for Summer Break Pt. 01'

The set up and the pacing are good, I think a little more details about Mrs. Baker's life and her story would be nice. Also, I think highlighting the inexperience of Bob with Jan would great to see when things escalate.

Very nice, a good warm up! With his youth and minimal refractory time, can't wait to see him wear her out. Will they catch feelings and become romantically involved, or just friends with benefits?

Enjoyed Mrs. Baker, and her playful seduction...

..though a few bits of random spelling: eg, "...in the throws of an orgasm." I believe you'll find it's "throes".

You have managed to engage both participants feelings beautifully,.... for your first chapter I found it reached the areas you intended very quickly.... more please !!

Entertaining start. Thanks for sharing