All Comments on 'Home Sweet Home'

Excellent first submition! I hope you write more soon. Longer stories as well would be good. I love reading love stories between friends. Thanks.

That was hot! I would have liked some more background on the characters, though. Keep writing.

For your first time, this is awesome! I hope that you'll follow this up with where they go together! Thank you!

It's evident from this piece, Greylady, that you can write and I've given you five stars for that. But...where this story falls down for me is that there is practically no story-line or plot, the bulk of it just being sex. The standard of your writing suggests that you are capable of better than this. So now, why not try creating a story where the sex takes second place to plot and characterisation? I'm sure you could do it.

Yes, how sweet it is! Talk about jam packed with sexual goodness, whew! Pleez, there must be a continuation. Greatly appreciated it