All Comments on 'Home Sweet Home Ch. 01'

More! MORE!!!

This looks promising. I like the story line and the characters. I like that you get into the characters, but leave more to be discovered. I see that you write muti chapter stories and I like that as well. I will see where this goes. Thanks for your time and imagination.

OK, I'm liking this. Great start.

Great, looking forward to lots more hopefully.

Excellent beginning! I look forward to reading more.

5

I really like how you build up the characters before rushing into anything. This has a lot of promise and even though I've no idea where it's heading I am looking forward to reading more. Thanks.

I am looking for new stories to read & I enjoyed this first chapter. Looking forward to more chapters.

Sue the ex-bitch for emotional distress and burn her money. Any eta on chapter 2?

Good start until he didn't press charges on her and then let her inside. She didn't deserve anything from him, not knowing parents were dead for months should have warned him. She was a user of people. He almost got it right when he thought drifter, grifter might be closer.

Missed opportunity:

The few hours it took the jury to convict a black man is not Harper Lee's point. It's that it was an all-white jury who ignored the evidence and who judged, in this case and a thousand others, that it was more important to intimidate the black community.

In today's language the trial illustrated systemic racism. The verdict was to reinforce white supremacy. On a more personal level Tom Robinson was the mockingbird, an innocent who's killing accomplished nothing.

I like it, but I'll refrain from giving it a rating until I see where it's going.

Generally, I like your stories and your style of writing. This one meanders to a very unsatisfactory conclusion and is, frankly, unbelievable. There's little, if any, wit to relieve the tedium.

I'll not continue with this but wait for the next "Criminal Affair" story.

Looking forward to reading more!

Second time reading, everything just clicks.

I like the way this is developing and looking forward to reading the rest. Excellent dialogue, btw.

Love the relaxed introduction to the characters, by not jumping straight into sex scenes the way a lot of stories do it gives the readers to get a feel for the characters.

They come across as realistic and believable. Looking forward to reading more.

Thanks for sharing

Tess (UK)

Love it !

Nice setup. Loved the way you are setting up the characters n their background

Helps us to familiarise with the characters...

Keep it up

....Godian...

A strong start. I like it.

One year my uncle was supposed to come to a family reunion. I had spoken with him the week before, encouraging him to caravan together, but he said he was stopping off to visit a friend. I was once red for him because of his age and because he was partially crippled from a stroke two decades earlier. Let on the night of the gathering for the reunion he had still not arrived. It turned out I was the only person who knew his itinerary. Through one thing and another, sometime after midnight his elder daughter called my uncle’s local police department, which then searched his duplex. They found him face down in a closet, where he had fallen and had been trapped for 28 hours. What did the policeman say to him? “How many drinks have you had?” Always an inquisition.

This, once again, proves that a story line introducing characters and setting the stage is far more important than immediate erotic content, especially in a novel. I already know this is another story that will hold my interest and look forward to reading more soon.

Really really liking this, I’m getting a solid read on all the characters, although let’s be honest Cops 1, being overweight due to desk jockeying, & 2, eating doughnuts (yes Brits spells it like that) is a bit cliched, but hey I’m getting a warm and happy feel about this story, I’d have liked to know a little more about his “tenant” but I’m guessing that’s upcoming. 5⭐️ No question!

Many thanks for writing and posting, cheers Ppfzz.

I think one of the first things when moving in would be to change the locks.. but oh well, it makes for a better story this way, lol. Good start.

Certainly captured my interest.

Great start! Looking forward to the next chapter.