by Kriegsmesser
I liked the concept of the story, although I think the ending was rushed and lacked depth. I feel like you had a great idea it could have been so much more
Thanks Otaku. Wasn't certain where to go from there. Endings are tough for me...
You couldn't have turned me off any more than this.
Part of what I want to do with my work is explore relationships between the grotesque and the erotic. I was a little sickened by it too, but I chose to include it anyway. It's simply what came to mind.
What a turn-off. Sounds like you have some jealousy-rage issues. The story didn't hold up. Jeanie never did anything that bad to the author for the author to be that hateful.
I'm not going to defend this story on moral grounds if that's what you're looking for me to do. It is (after all) listed under "non consent." Additionally, I made my intensions about the piece clear in my previous post.
This reminds me a lot of the erotic anthologies written by women for women. I like that it explores base hungers.. it also has that interesting quality of being realistic in described emotions while being unrealistic in described actions. Wonderful read.
Although I prefer definatively happy slutty endings, I liked the story.
Desperate for a continuation of this exact storyline..this work deserves a series