All Comments on 'Homecoming Surprise'

I liked it. Very good for a short story. Would love to see some more development so I could get a little more involved in the story.

I love the story. I think it could have another chapter . AAAAAA++++++

That was a good story, hopefully you plan to continue it further. Would love to read more.

Great love story and hot sex. I enjoyed it while having my morning coffee. Nice way to start a Friday. Thanks for the hard work of writing a solid short story. I can't wait to read more of your work.

I really liked your story. It shows a lot of love not only for his mother but for the one he truly loved both as a mother and a wife.

Great story thanks for no over the top sex. Very nice read.

Absolutely loved this story..... Well written, lovely style, and just great!

Trite More like an outline or sketch than a real story. All we have here is machine like almost automation... little if any emotion, actions that make absolutely no sense, no reactions to really bizarre frames. It's a shame really because there is the really bare bones of a rather intriguing tale here. Unfortunately what we have is not much of anything.

Gave it 3 stars because it is not offensive, just a whole bunch of nothing burger.

Best story I have EVER read here. I especially love how you have different cultures getting along (old, young, different race (especially with JJ being receptive of his non-white classmates and Keisha missing Dar)). We need more of that in real life today. I also loved the detail of how JJ was growing up (especially the milk and cookies part and his interactions with Dar---very sweet). Please keep writing and please stay safe. David

4/5

Was actually believable, not so much fantasy. I think this may be the first time I posted a comment here.

That was a great story,I was looking for page 3

Loved the story and living in Georgia I double love it. You had me smiling hoping and laughing. Thank you for writing the story.

Great story and well written.

Good basic story structure but some dialogue is way overdone.

Very mature approach to a tenuous situation. Well done.

No extra baggage, no fluff, no extraneous BS. Very well done.

Liked it, like all your stories, 5/5. That said, making her a slut didn't add anything to the story. His guilt and subsequent departure would have been the same without the Friday Night Slut thing, just saying.....

Excellent story! 5*s! Could have done without the attempt to sound black (kinda racist. Many of us speak standard English just fine.) But the mere inclusion was nice. Again, thoroughly enjoyable tale.

great story.

I loved this story.

Very good story kept my interest and wanted to know how things would work out did not expect the the kid but great touch. Keep up the writing/story telling

Thanks

Never considered commenting on a story. It's not what I'm here for, But this one is great for other reasons. Really, great effort,

I have read a lot of stories on this site and I think you nailed it this time, a very good story, something like that could actually happen in real life, I voted 4 stars as I think you could have added a bit more to the story than you did, to make it a bit longer.

I don't write about stories I've read but this one got under my skin.

really good one!

My apologies if I have offended anyone with the black family. They were based on real people that were my next door neighbors in Valdosta, Ga forty years ago. Their speech was the way I wrote it, and she did understand people better than anyone I’ve ever met. Including her in the story was a tribute to her, not a slam. She is also in another one of my stories - T’s BH Lounge.

Great on the the stories

Loved it! Five stars and a favorite point!

Best I have read for a very long time.Keep the quality going.

Excellent! - And I don't think anyone could accuse you of racial slurs, given the you made her the smartest person in the story. :-)

loved it. And you nailed the "salt of the earth" mode of his black neighbors. Growing up in the Mississippi Delta during the 60s I met a couple of "Shirley's" that were wise beyond all knowledge.

Nice.

Thanks for sharing. 5* Slainté

Really good story, with real characters. I love the interaction with the neighbors in Georgia. Keep up the great work.

Poorly written, rushed, no real storyline. Highly unlikely as well, hard to suspend disbelief

What a wonderful story...It goes to show, no matter what color a person is, you can learn and gain more knowledge if you just open your ears and pay attention..5🌟

Sweet story…love is love, after all…!

Excellent.

Would have liked it to be a longer story, that said i enjoyed it.

A squel would be good

Loved it! Your stories always seem to make my eyes leak.

Please do a follow up to this story .

See what happens to them in the near future.

Masterpiece. You have quite a way with dialogue. You are also a master at smoothing out difficult and awkward situations that were developing quite normally due to special situation of the main couple and their relationship in this story. It was very well done. You will get tons of requests for a follow-up!

5*

BJ

You write a very fine story, and best of all, you write it well. Thank you for an enjoyable read. I’m not convinced that a sequel would fit; IMHO, you’ve covered all the bases very well. Well worth all five stars, more if they were available.

Yes very moving, there is a delicate strings of events the create tension and the emotions with physical needs cannot really push aside our well-being depends our ability to deal a balance. Great story.

Very hartwarming story. I thoroughly enjoy it. Write more such stories, but leave this without sequel, it would deterre from the candid style of this one.

That’s the best story I’ve read here in a while!

Jacobi needs a little sister.

Love the twist with JJ. Didn’t expect that. Good read as well.

That was absolutely superb. You write how I only wish I could write. A story in which their bodies are realistic. A story that is not about the sex, but about the love and the romance, and about the human connection. It was beautiful.

. I tried writing a realistic mother-son romance a few years ago. You far exceed me at all levels. You wrote wha I wanr to read. Thank you for the wonderful story. I cannot wait to read what you have in store for the future.

Impressive, good reading

You should do something with Shirley in another story. She’s a role model if ever there was one.

Loved the story, makes me want to read more on both the families.

Great story. Thanks for sharing.

G

Lovely romance…. 5/5

Sir I wish you had written a part 2 where they live together and love each other and maybe even have another child or 2, then finish with many happy decades together!!

A tear jerking story. Thank you.

It would have been a 6 stars score. Another chapter would have been really really good. Thanks.

I really enjoyed the story. I agree with the other comments in hoping for the story to continue.

One of the best that I have read. 5 stars

awesome but wish you would have written one more chapter and showed them living as husband and wife and maybe a couple more children. It was one of the best I've read 5 stars!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Very nice and loved how you brought it all together, but like some of the other comments another chapter with another child would be awesome, 5 BIG STARS+

just what i needed! The last big story i read was demented, and i told the author so! your story, fairly simple in scope and length wins hands down! The love really shines through. No Mom to conquer and no dad to cuckold,. Just blissed out Nirvana. Can't thank you enough. Lovely story. Thanks for jotting it off!

Fantastic story but it was to short although it's been a long time still wish you would continue with them living like a normal family and have more children, 5 stars.

I loved it, one of the most tender stories I've ever had the pleasure to read. Thank you

Five star, loved it, but I personally would get a DNA test only because she has had one night stand every Friday that she has admit and Dar is also well aware of that

A beautiful story! I loved it!

This story caught my eye and I’m glad I read it.

It was a little short and a second chapter would be amazing!

Well done

Excellent portrayal of a very difficult subject. well written