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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Get an editor!

Way to much gratuitous sex and sophomoric banter.

This has good merit as a story but is being derailed by the ungodly vast quantity of sex scenes and endless childish banter that would be expected from high schoolers. The dialogue does not fit the characters.

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B.S. Professional Studies M.A. History I Love Books with great content, and words in general. Language is my love. I write for my enjoyment. I write non-erotic pieces, and add some titilating scenes in every so often, to pick up your heart rate. If you are looking for smut, l...