All Comments on 'Horsing Around'

Old MacDonald never said anything about this being on his farm...lol. But, seriously. It is refreshing to read an actual erotic story...unconventional as it may be. The character development and the building tensions were deliciously written. I'm going to go read the next installment now.

I think you have four converts now. I haven't read the 2nd part yet, but the first is difinitely different and beautifully written. Go ahead and keep thinking a lot about yourself if that's what it takes to inspire you to write like this.

It's nice to read a story that is not so improbable or so poorly written that you want to roll your eyes and move on to something else.

Thanks

So beautifully written. I initially thought that there were some minor grammatical errors in your story, (like the use of the word ‘worst’ where it may have been more appropriate to use ‘worse’) in a few different places, but I’ve come to realise that this may just be a quirk from the fact that you are in South Africa, I’m in Australia, and anyone else reading this from around the world may have their own version of what is correct English…

I also should have realised straight away that writers of your calibre simply don’t make those sort of mistakes. So, back to my thoughts on your story: If you were a published writer, I would pay good money to read your stories regardless of the genre. I'm tend to be very loyal to writers I enjoy. Good stories fill an emptiness in me. Try reading Bob Clark Jr and youbadboy. I've just added xyster to this list. Love it, please don’t stop writing. Now onto “Horsing Around Too”. Cheers.

In all seriousness this may be one of my all time favorite stories under such a topic. I would have liked it just as much without the more detailed acts of the horses. It really isn't needed for the plot and meaning of the story. My first thought was that you included these details only to appease the less fortunate readers who need "graphic designs" for utmost pleasure. "Graphic Designs". Get it?

More of this well written story - it is a real turn-on - Ta

I loved the cockiness of the author(ess),and in part two, when the brother is trying to make a popping sound, I laughed harder than I have in years. That passage alone is pure genius.

The story inflames the mind, stresses the heart, and my body glows . . .

awesome hot horny story. reading this some what old story. finding it still has the inpact of one very erotic brilliant written story. now on to tha next part,

Xyster, you have the reader thinking in the wrong area, very good, then you bring them back to reality of the situation, again, very good. I look forward the continuation of this story.

Thanks,

Handyman2

really well written in comparison to some of the other stuff on here. i love the taboo of both animals and incest. really hit the spot ;)

You have piqued my imagination with this piece. Well done- I look forward to reading part "Too" ;)

i READ BOTH STORIES AND COULDNT HAVE BEEN MORE PLEASED WITH THE STYLE AND OVER ALL STORY.. YOU HAD ME IN STICHES DISCRIBING YOUR INCOUNTER.. ABSOLUTLY THE BEST I HAVE EVER PRUSED IN THIS SITE..

Now, that was a lead into a story that was unexpected! Great story!! Great writing style!!

A decent story idea. But this author needs a good editor. This story is seriously overwritten.

And, frankly, the writer needs to start that editing process himself. He is way too impressed with what looks like a first draft. An undisciplined first draft. A novice's first draft.

i gave up at what i thought must be the first half. As I scrolled down to the end to reach this comment area, I discovered it was more like the first 5th.

You would have had to pay me to read it all.

Xyster-

You are a VERY NASTY girl, and I LOVE YOU FOR IT!! Life in South Africa must certainly be exciting and stimulating, considering the things you write about! And, you are so clean in your style, obviously putting a lot of thought and effort into the writing.

Thank You, Thank You for the stories!! One-of-a-kind, and so touching...I am looking forward to more!

"MADDOG"

What a tedious story. A VERY long and surprisingly unsexy build up. That very wordy and self-indulgent discussion about penetration was quite boring. In fact I found myself flicking through the whole story, sifting through the verbose text to pick up the scant kernels of the tale. There are while paragraphs devoted to making a single point. The whole thing seems to be about showcasing how smart the writer is. The whole thing is in desperate need of a decent edit.

Love the content, It felt a bit overly detailed in some parts. But very much a good read. Nice work.