All Comments on 'Hot Summer'

the text is messed up, otherwise a 5 star read

Great read, but I didn't need to read it twice. Read what you write, please, but keep writing.

I dont know what happened but it messed up a good story.

I dont know what happened but it messed up a good story.

See how irritating that is?

See how irritating that is?

Please have Lit fix it, thanks

Please have Lit fix it, thanks

In addition to the double copy, there are many typos. For example, she called him Noah at one point, enogorged should be engorged, pointed in and out should be pounded in and out, and so on. Those push the reader right out of the fantasy.

A good story, would like to read further adventures.

Crappy cut and paste thief

has overlayed various items. you will need a sys admin and reposting to get realistic votes.

Super hot, amazingly descriptive story BUT it really needs work with the editing. It was very very hard to read with all the poorly edited cut and pastes.

3 out of 10

If not for all the cut and paste errors and typos, it would have been a five. Clean it up for the next chapter (or your next story) and votes will improve.