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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
trim it down

A little heavy on the background. Most people are browsing for a quick read with lots of sex while they jerk off, not a novel. If it is going to be this long the sex to story ratio needs to be higher.

An editor might help you slim it down.

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Life got awfully busy for a time. I hope to add a few stories again.

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