by Bkat
Very good fuck story. I liked how you wrote the sexeyparts with all personal players came to life. I enjoyed the story,and hope for more of the cuckold husband
Your female character doesn’t sound female at all. He sounds like a he trying to write as a female. Because of that I quit reading after two sentences. Not convincing at all for me.
First she said she chose a black thong, then turns out it was yellow... inconsistencies. The story was good though.
I enjpyed this story. Try running it by a woman for her point of view. The women sounded like women, don't let critics ever bring you down, just listen there may be something there for you.
Keep writing, it's how you get better