All Comments on 'Houston Ch. 03: Alpha and Omega'

Another one bites the dust!

5

Enjoyed the story. Thanks.

At the end of it. Did not see this coming.

Is it the End? Interesting story line, looking forward to see how you develop it so I certainly hope not!

Hopefully there is more!

Turning his ditzy wife into an agent is a pipe dream, considering the years of training agents go thru. And launching a missile attack on US soil was laughable. Maybe turn down the "impossible to believe" level next time? This was just nuts.

This series is a very nice foundation piece. Anyone unable to understand and read in "Suspension of Disbelief" should NOT be allowed to read your stories.

Just so many wonderful sets of series in your incredible, awesome world.

5* as usual.

You've laid the foundation for a really interesting, ongoing saga here, please keep it coming:-)

I have always admired your writing skills. I enjoy a good mystery story which has a happy ending. One negative comment is that you had a few more words left out of sentences than usual. A last reading with fresh new eyes before publishing would be appreciated. Top marks.

Really.

Got to foolish for me, became an episode of the old Spy vs Spy comic

You tend to write trash, Tramp, but this is your worst yet.

Way to bring it home saddletramp. Another good episode in the on going destruction of MMAS. Your stories are a great escape where the good guys and girls win and the bad ones to down hard. It's formula, but I love it. Keep it coming.

These stories and the whole series is so pathetically stupid that the only possible conclusion is that this particular order is mentally retarded

26thNC... you think this is a good story?

wow

Ps.... 7th WISCONSIN descendant

Another little reading episode in your fantasy world always works for me. I don't usually criticise anyone as I can't write anything but there were a couple words missing?. Anyway I still enjoyed the escapism and keep em coming😁

Loved it. You keep writing 'em, we'll keep reading 'em. I can picture all those FBI guys on the elevator, no sound except for the muzak playing through tinny speakers, reminded me of that scene from "The Blues Brothers." LOL.

Thanks for posting.

Another great fantasy story. 5 stars from me.

Great Story Saddletramp. I'm always look forward to your stories.

Please, please, please either get a good editor or a proofreader. I found myself reading several lines over and over again to make sense of them. You have a tendency to leave words out and this story is by far the worst one in that respect. It DOES seriously distract from an otherwise decent story. Apart from that, the characterization is good, the dialogue is sometimes a little 'clunky' but on the whole works pretty well

But this was definitely a good romp and a bit of fun.

5-stars

-JMFC

Hope not the end!

good story glad oscar is back more please

This was a fun read. Great continuation of your MMAS series. Unbelievable, you bet! Captivating, just the way I like it! If I wanted some true to life blah, blah, I would just not bother to read. Love it!

Keep up the good work, and especially (please) keep this series going. 5*

I can’t think of another writer who could pull off these types of plots. The absurdity of everything if you think too hard about it. However, you are such a talented writer, you completely expand our suspension of disbelief to accept everything and just enjoy the ride.

she kept her legs closed. interesting concept.

Brad and Angelina.... Mr. And Mrs. Smith....uh huh!

It was a good just let your mind go with the flow, type of story. I enjoyed it. Like to see where they go from here. I know I have my share of the idiot Anons who have nothing constructive to say. They’ve never written anything but their name and probably misspelled that. Keep em coming

All loose ends are tied up. Don't you love the chickenshit anons who bravely bash stories? Reminds me of the great and wonderful bragging cocksmen who regale their sexual triumphs but who, in actuality, have only been intimate with their hand. Bless their little cowardly hearts.

erupts into NCIS situation which leads to more tales and Cities. TK U MLJ LV NV

glad it had an ending and wasn't left unfinished. I know all of your stories have to tie together, etc. etc. time to move this show from Loving Wives to Sci Fi/Fantasy. That's my last decent rating in THIS section.

Harry inVa, Carpetbagger descendent. Guess our Grandpas missed each other on Macpherson's Ridge. Not too many in either Reg. survived the first day. Mine didn't survive the Pickett-Pettigrew Charge. Fortunately, he had eight children when he was drafted.

Would love to read about some of John and Houston’s exploits as partners.

Reminded me of "True Lies", with Schwarzenegger and Jamie Lee Curtis. Ignore the assholes and keep posting!

Personally like to read about their lives on the Field and how things. go from their and does she stay the woman she is or was?

I enjoyed this tale, it fits well in the world you have created with Oscar and the rest of the force (even though it is a different team).

I hope you will continue to bring us tales about them in the future.

5/5

You did not explain how or when wifey obtained so much information about Omega that she had to be killed. As I recall the only information she had she was given it by Linda.

Kind of cartoonish. Glad you are enjoying your creation. Just too contrived for me. Keep up the good work.

more oscar warren 5 stars

Another great Saddletramp story.

More please!

First we have: " "Even though she didn't it at the time. Add to that the middle eastern connection. The man George was going to sell her to has connections to terrorist groups all over the area. "

The first sentence of that paragraph is missing something, maybe a noun or a verb or something critical like that.

Then we have the "poscket" later in the story. What is a poscket and do you need one if you already memorized the address?

Who is paying all these do-gooders? I imagine in the mind of Saddleconspiracy there is a story playing itself out every day. I guess the old era convalecent homes get to feel a bit constricting once you're in there. Hope for your stay being a figment is your only option (alternative reality through erotic fiction).

Smokepole

Did you revert to being a teenager in order to write this drivel?

Try using actual logic and sanity to spell out your story, plot line, linear timeline etc. And try not ass rape the suspension of belief aspect, it was quite jarring how you did that in the story.

Great story. It was fun, fast and an enjoyment to read. The good guys won and the bad guys got crushed, now that is my type of story. Please bring us more of the Smith's or others like it. Keep up the great stories.

Reading those other anonymous commenters they give us anonymous commenters a bad name.

Everything is just too snicker-snack and just-so. Is there a chummy cliche unused and laying around? Throw it in, why not? Here's a suggestion: Try writing smaller stories. Competent novelists need 300 pages to flesh out a story like this. You tried to do it in a few dozen. Of course it reads like a bad comic book. On another topic...remember when we could trust alphabet federal agencies to be competent and honest? Those days are long past. Wake up and smell the latrine. The bureaucrats look after themselves, first and always.

*****. Loved it! Hope to see more from this universe in the future 👍

Don't think it's the end. You, the author, set yourself up to continue. LOL!! Looking forward to the tale of how John and Houston finish off Omega. 2 weeks training and Regis tells John about an upcoming assignment. Wonder what that could be? Think Alpha the beginning takes out Omega the end. LOLOL Enjoyed getting lost in a fun read for a while. Thanks!! 5 stars!! Looking for more!!

What coma?

I want more. Please keep the saga of Mr.& Mrs. Smith 10 stars ( The Bear can't count. Sorry. Or not. ) This is a pleasant change from all the cheating, and sometimes unbelievable sexcapades. Almost as good as anything SS06 has written. The Bear approves.

The BEAR

A nice change of pace. More, please.

Excellent story more please. Keep this story going your definitely onto a winner

I suspect ST is going to serve us another tale with Mr. and Mrs. Smith!

I also vote yes for more stories with Mr & Mrs Smith

definitely needs more stories to finish excellent story so far

Please write more Justice and Houston stories

I like this 3 part series you did. Your own version of Mr. and Mrs. Smith. Keep writing more stories like this

If you haven't completely put the MMAS story to bed yet, these two have been read into some of their work, could be another idea for a story there.

OK you need to extend this story..... this is good fantasy reading.... Love it!!!

Red you are correct. This story needs to go on. Tramp, your fans are begging.

These characters deserve more stories. There’s plenty of intel work for them, with nothing to do with MMAS.

I agree with the last comments and urge you to bring back Mr and Mrs Smith.

Outstanding story!!! We need more of these two, but not involving the MMAS. Have them take down some regimes, like those frauds in Saudi Arabia, or maybe a terrorist organization. Lots of ideas to explore.

Please keep the Story going

I hope not!!!!!

Read it, liked it...

But, some secret agents from some ultra-secret agency arresting bad guys in person...

And brought a civilian at the scene...

... And why bother with Miranda

Yeah, fiction and all ;)

Great story! I would like to read more about their adventures together.

Another great story. I have a soft spot for stories with happy endings. As is echoed by other comments, some more stories about them would be greatly appreciated.

Nam vet

They didn't look for the other women nor did they tell their husbands what happened to them and they were probably dead.

Good end for Omega

In the 2nd chapter, while Agents 86 and 99 were in the junkyard riding the portable toilet down into the corridors of Control's basement stronghold, I kept hearing the theme music from an old TV spy spoof serial playing in my head.

Like the TV version, this story offered up some good chuckles, too. As a serious story, though, it fell a little bit short.

Good stuff

Your latest post on this storyline made me go back and reread the originals series. (Downside of getting old, I guess.) Loved it as much the second time as the first. Now, on to Washington!

It would be so cool to see these two

come back in further episodes.

(Hint, hint to saddletramp)

I liked this one, a lot.

fantastic way more than a5. I really loke it in your universe!

That was just a whole helluva lot of fun. Disbelief happily suspended. Don’t remember what I thought the first time but this time it was like cotton candy to a kid. You know it’s bad but it tastes so good. Like I said, Get Smart meets 007.

I am ex-military and this is just sci-fy crap. You lost my interest on the first page. Keep trying though - you never know when you might actually produce a solid story with some believable characters. You only get a one for this effort.

Your story, your universe, your fantasy. I loved it!

As a 27 year veteran, I thoroughly enjoyed suspending disbelief and enjoyed the fiction. Some of your tactics were... improvised, but I enjoyed them. I've worked with the FBI, and your depiction of them was great!

Excellent plot! While fantastical, it just worked.

I suddenly realized that I was hearing Houston's voice as a very soft, kind of high-pitched, almost squeaky sound. I also imagine her speaking in a very slow cadence. There is/was an actress in the 70s/80s who was blond and well built, that sounded exactly like that. Love the story. I will be watching for more in the Adventures of John and Houston Smith.

Great story great subjects please keep going

This was a lot of fun .

Thanks

Five stars

Ended fast but I know there are more to the saga

Disappointed that omega turned out to be just another evil organization.

Would've been interesting if they were also a government agency.

Damn

Why are anonymouses such dicks?

This could be a mini-series om HBO. Incredible work. Keep it coming.

Five Stars

I hope this story continues.

Great story (as usual). Only complaint is that Houston is supposed to be so bright (but okay, a bit ditzy), yet she states that she expected John to want to be Cucked and she thought it was going to be a good thing for their marriage, BUT she knew that if he refused that they would send in the Enforcers to hurt or kill him. That is so way beyond ditzy and makes no sense.

need more of this couple

Great story!!!

Great story, I sure hope that you continue writing more adventures of these two interesting characters. Well done 5/5

Yeah, still too much of a long reach for me to suspend my beliefs. But then again, I'm a former cop and I know that an untrained civilian isn't going to be invited on the raid. That's Hollywood bullshit straight out of the movie "Silver Streak". They would have politely asked Houston to surrender her card and proceeded from there with her required to remain in the command post. There's a fine line in writing fiction that you can't cross. You can make up whatever you want to, but you still have to keep it believable. 3/5

Well you kept it going through all chapters at the same pace, nice silly story but well thought out and written

It was a great story in all aspects of what it takes to be great. Saddletramp1956 is arguably one of, if not the best, author here.

I liked the drone a lot. Sometimes direct action is the most satisfying.

MUCH better once she untitled herself.

Looking forward to more.

Good series. Now, on to the next one.

...I just realised they're Mr and Mrs Smith. I will now and forever more picture them as Brad Pitt and a (blonde) Angelina Jolie. I need to watch that movie again, sometime 😂

A little too far fetched for me. 3

Bill S.

OTT, but very readable

Just a few years ago we would’ve assumed project Alpha were the good guys. Now we know their main objective is destroying politicians who dare oppose the state.

Sad.

Saddletramp may be OTT but it's my kind of OTT...

Well done sir

Am i the only one that wants Regis to have some sort of closure with his ex wife. Please saddletramp make Regis' ex wife learn the error of her ways, at least let him see his kids

Amusing but not to be taken seriously. Just about every cliche in the book. Shame I read this straight after Flash which was much better