by hotbox
I applaud you for your efforts, but this really was a shocking piece of writing. Watch for tense, spelling and please don't write in 'text' talk. In all honesty, I don't understand how this submission was accepted to lit. I thought our standards had lifted?
Anyway, I hope you keep with it though, and put in the necessary effort to accomplish a piece that is worth taking the time to read. Good luck.
Amazing work, i can tell from your writing this is all true and wish you the best of luck with your mistress, you are truly blessed