All Comments on 'How I Met My Wife'

Great story but hard to follow at times because of the awful grammar

If the grammar is awful, there must be many errors. Please help me by quoting a few, but none from the direct dialogue. People do not speak in grammatically complete sentences: leave off the obvious subject; don't complete sentences; make other grammatical errors. We all do when speaking.

Maybe if one is reading the story on his smart phone with short lines of text, this is more apparent and disturbing.

Someone tactfully posted a private message pointing out lots of errors, mostly typos: omitted letters, wrong or omitted quotation marks.

My apologies for my previous posting, and thanks to whomever for taking all the trouble to do that.

The critical but helpful message is appreciated, leBonhomme

the story - as told - is tepid. The erotic temperature luke warm at best. It was told with all the enthusiasm of a travelogue. All of your characters are all so lethargic in their interactions. Borderline boring man.