All Comments on 'How Long Can You Resist Ch. 01'

It's been 10 years and the story is unfinished. Just an fyi if you're just finding this.

Is the author a Yankee? Chickens? They are fowls actually.

I enjoyed the begining of your story! i think your well on your way to being a great auther. i have a couple of seggustions that might help your writing. Im not a writer or anything but i am a reader and i know what i like. in the begining you were a bit to descriptive, it was a little finicky. and as well maybe putting some sort of dividion in when you are switching from point of views becuase at first it was a little confusing. anyways thats just my opinion, and i still really liked it!

I like a story that is slow to develop.. off to read the next chapter.

This is a great beginning! You're on your way towards becoming one of my favorites already! Thank you!