by totallyatease
I have really enjoyed this story up until this chapter. And then I feel like all that good story telling just disappeared with the sex. The dialogue was really bad at some points and I kinda wonder where Izzy and Daniel went; like I was reading an entirely different story with different characters.
-amebede
This chapter was really bad and like the other comment, it seemed like it was a different story all together, and the 'oh Daniel' is getting irritating. Not to mention the punctuation errors that you keep making and even with others suggesting an editor or you learn where punctuation needs to be, it seems you just don't care, you can't or won't accept CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, which is what those comments are. If I opened a book, which I do before I buy it and read a few pages, I wouldn't buy it seeing how bad the punctuation is.
You seem to be only able to write naive little weak females and that is getting really boring, I used to love your writing, but it's just getting boring.
1* for the 'Oh Daniel' and punctuation.
Little Izzy turns out to have her own fire. She gave us hints of it back at the start, and that's as it should be.
I continue to enjoy the gentle tone of the story, and with this chapter, the fervence. Each installment has been a joy.
I have been looking forward to this chapter but there seems to be the spark missing that was in the other chapters, I hope it is because this is a bridge chapter into something more exciting in the next chapters.
Also the grammar has been dire this time. I really hope the next chapter is as good as all the others. Looking forward to the next chapter
LL
It seems to me that this chapter was just about right for the story. Now that they are lovers and have gotten to this stage of their relationship they face the age old question. Is it just a fling, an enjoyment of each other through sex, or do they take it to the next level. Both have barriers to overcome, mostly Daniel because of his first disastrous marriage and Izzy won't stay over because she doesn't want to disappoint Mrs. Coates. Izzy is overly sensitive to what others think of her so suspect she will have to push the issue once again. I suspect that there will be some event that will force Daniel to commit, maybe the inference that another man might visit Izzy's home?
Get over it. if you don't like it, don't read it!