by Exeltus
love it, pacing is fine but too short, try releasing longer parts or release them sooner.
I like the concept, this story has great potential, I wonder how the paladin will get her into the order, will she ever transform into something other than a succubus(like a siren or valkarie)
The story of how the palladin finally tames her heart along with her already enslaved body will be a good read.
They could have good adventures together, I wonder if they'd ever meet the demon queen.
P.S. don't make the succubus hairy, also can she lactate or get pregnant?
The plot got a little better by the end, but the story is moving so slowly it is hard to stay interested. The succubus is still to easily controlled by her master.
A very nice read i hope that you can pick this enchanting tale up again. I would love to see the character build up of the both protagonists