All Comments on 'Hunters Journey of Self Discovery'

Long winded and tedious. Hunter? Did somebody pat you on the head and tell you "good job"?

wonderful story,luved it

Great story and I love how you developed it. I did notice some typos but can forgive you for them.

Ok. Loved this. 5 stars. Truly but gosh the typos and mispells!

“Let the reins go a little, … “ — Annie’s great advice. You created two believable characters in a near perfect example of a “yin and yang” relationship and a wonderfully captivating storyline. Could go on and on about how your piece resonated for me (and I am sure other readers), suffice to say 5 stars.

A very dramatic, compelling and romantic story. Great writing, and I am looking forward to your next. Five stars, of course. Randi.

Day and night different between "The Proposal" and this story. Beautifully woven into a love story guided by money, lack of money but love, then money with one partner and none for the other, before evening out. A fine representation of the theme.

I loved this. I have no idea how anyone could describe it as long winded and tedious. It was long but told an amazing story full of love, angst, grief and passion. Thank you.

Money does make it awkward, but no money is not cool either. This one is a lovely two sided tale a bit Dickensian, riches to rags to riches and all. Of course Charles D would probably be over come with the hot sex, but that would be his problem.

Nice work. I did not find it tedious at all, nothing that didn't add to the story. Sometimes life comes at you fast. Sometimes things take time.

I enjoyed this story very much. Enough to give it 5 stars. But I did not enjoy reading it - so may typos, and misspellings! At least what appeared to be. Almost like a spell checker ripped all the 'w's off of 'was', or do kiwis always use 'as' instead? Other words as well. It was a slog, although I wouldn't say long winded as the other commenter has. I just don't envision an author that obviously spent the time and love on a story as nice as this just not being concerned about the other details....

I liked Hunter and Annie and enjoyed reading about them. I didn't feel that Hunter's mother's change of attitude was adequately explained, but that didn't spoil the two lovers' story. Thank you for sharing.

Wow, loved it

Nicely paced love story with the happy ending that I often prefer. Thanks for sharing.

Enjoyed it, but, please, please proofread your stories before publishing them

I almost gave up halfway through. Glad I didn't! 5*

Wow, epic! Don’t normally bother with lesbian stuff but this was a sweet little tale. Loved the multi country story. You’re a kiwi legend cagivagurl, keep it up. Nice one.

Great story! Loved it a lot! The shifting dynamics between Annie and Hunter were well done.

Well plotted, great characterization, great narrative flow. I'm giving 5 Stars in spite of some proofreading issues. Do yourself and your audience a favor and download a free copy of Grammarly. You won't be sorry.

Thanks for an enjoyable read . . .

More, please, wonderful characters, wonderful story. pity we can only give 5*

Oh my, good story, but did you buy an extra large box of commas?

That worked really well. A sweet, lovely story. 5*.

Brilliantly done. 5*

Excellent as always! I love your writing, look forward to your next one.

It what about the kids??? :)

Great characters, as usual. Great story. 5 big stars.

Hooked

Great story. Five stars. As a backpacker I have being to many of the places described in the story. Your descriptions are outstanding. The last time I visited NZ I stayed at

kati Kati N.R. Great place, great country and great people. Peter Australia

Love stories where the author takes you places you haven't been. You make us feel like we are there too. I hope you continue with this scenario and characters. Lots more to explore.

Thanks for this great Money Honey story. I loved how it developed and its depth. The characters were well presented and they, too, grew as the story unfolded. Hunter’s mom was the biggest and happiest surprise, learning to grow and accept change for her daughters’ (yes, both, eventually) happiness. There were quite a few typos but the intent was generally clear, giving a good 5* overall result.

Excellent story. That was an outstanding progression for Hunter. Entitled heiress to living hand to mouth, all the bumps that happen as relationships grow, to acceptance by the nightmare MIL.

Like @onlythelonelylove wrote: what about kids?

Good story. well and simply told. One of your best actually and in a category that I never would have read if not part of the Money Honey event. I have always considered you a good writer, one worth reading, but I usually think your stories would be improved if they were 20% shorter. A lot of your storytelling seems to dwell on minutia, but I don't see anything here that should be edited out. I think you hit the sweet spot this time. Well done.

Great work, not into the Lesbian theme but enjoyed this one.

Wonderful tale and I enjoyed reading it immensely.

Lovely story 👏👏👏🙏

love this story

thank you

A riveting story from start to finish. I watch for your new stories and this was one of the best. A clear 5* story of the growth of three people (yep, Mum included).

Excellent story

Excellent story

What a great story. thanks

Adorable. Loved it.

Like most commenters, I loved this tale and didn't find it at all tedious or boring. A few have mentioned it but there were so many missing W's on words that it felt extremely rushed. There were other mistakes but I can usually just fill in the proper words as I'm reading. The missing W's almost felt intentional if there weren't so many. Great story but it really did need a proof before publication. Thanks for sharing!

Very good story.Something different. from the normal mundane offerings.

Wonderful story, with a tremendous character development for all the main characters. The scenes of the fruit picking life have such vitality, and appreciation of the people, including the lovely couple who look after Hunter when she is down in spite of the woman's alcoholism. The ups and downs of the two main characters as they fail to reveal their lives to each other, and strive to find their feet in the world are beautifully handled. In sumary, a lovely, lively glimpse into other lives; apart from the typos, really don't understand why it does not hit something like 4.90 - can't see how it canrate less than 5.

I read this story when it first came out, enjoyed it, and meant to leave a comment. I must have been sidetracked by something because I totally overlooked or forgot the comment. So here's a belated 'well done'. Great tale.

Another excellent story. One of the best. I was hesitant about reading a story about lesbians, but that was my misfortune to wait. What an adventure for Annie and Hunter experienced things we can dream about. Mum was a bit of a surprise initially to try and drive a wedge between the two, but in the end it was her acceptance of Annie that brought everyone together. Please keep writing Cagivagurl!

A truly lovely story! Thanks for sharing it with us.

Thanks all your contributions are real stories and this is no exception. You write so well and the sex just fits in naturally. I am certainly intending to read a lot more of your stories.

You did it again. Another fine story. At first when I looked at the word count I thought it would be a little long. In fact I wasn’t ready for it to end! Annie and Hunter are quite a pair, actually a very in love pair. When Hunter’s made her announcement mI knew things were going to wind up. Still, it was one heck of a ride. Thanks for the journey and thanks for sharing.

Another fabulous story thanks.

Very good story, misspelled words detracted but not enough to drop a rating . 5*****

Oh my! You bloody awful person! This middle aged man is mopping up tears. Thank you for this story.

Yes.

I like this story very much… very nicely written… Annie‘s reactions to money a bit extreme…5 stars

Possibly even better 2nd time around. Thanks for all your stories, you write so well

I absolutely love your stories. Just the best!!!

I loved this so much! Every time I read another of your stories, I seem to end up having a new favourite one. I have to say it takes me a little longer reading them, with me being British... I keep reading them in my head with a Kiwi accent 😂 (I feel it's a must for character-appreciation). I can't wait to read even more of your future stories, if they're even half as good as this one, they'll be amazing!

Thanks again ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Yes being lobed for the person you are and not for money or beauty or fame or else ….. yes thats truly a fact for people in such positions, does this partner love my assets or me ….. so Hunters and Annies road movie was spectacular, hunters stepping down from the penthouse to the farmland, working hard but discovering life was wonderful to follow ….. the sadness about an ending lifetime, the death of a beloved one can break you totally and is a dramatic experience ….. after alll love won again and you wrote another amazing tale

Thank you for this 💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💫💫💫💫💫💫💫💫💫🍀

Yes being lobed for the person you are and not for money or beauty or fame or else ….. yes thats truly a fact for people in such positions, does this partner love my assets or me ….. so Hunters and Annies road movie was spectacular, hunters stepping down from the penthouse to the farmland, working hard but discovering life was wonderful to follow ….. the sadness about an ending lifetime, the death of a beloved one can break you totally and is a dramatic experience ….. after alll love won again and you wrote another amazing tale

Thank you for this 💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💫💫💫💫💫💫💫💫💫🍀

What a remarkable journey.

From a rebellious daughter yearning to be free from the 'gilded cage' to the growth and awareness of a burgeoning strong heroine. (Like the 'princess and the pauper' or Annie is liken to Esmeralda from the ' hunchback of Daddy's accountancy.

Then the self realization 'world tour' like in Mitchener's ' Caravansai'.

Happy ending for the family.

Jeez.

I'm working my way down the alphabetical order of your work. I've enjoyed all of it. This one is as good as the best of them.