All Comments on 'Hypnotic Erosion Ch. 01'

interesting hope it continues

Could have been interesting but there are so many grammar and syntax errors (so poorly edited) that it's hard to follow the story line

Sorry, friend, but I doubt I will become a native speaker anytime soon. I did all I could to make the text as readable as possible, but there's only so much I can do. If grammar and syntax errors make it impossible for you to focus (to which I can totally relate to in my first language, so no hurt feelings) you best avoid my work.

Need more

Had no problem with grammar or syntax errors. I have a bachelor's degree and am a native speaker. You did fine.

Next part? Please?

Wish it was me undergoing therapy

I liked it, but I'm not a big fan of dirty toilets or piss. It's dirty and it stinks. Makes me want to vomit.

Love it