All Comments on 'I Finally Go Clubbing While Dressed'

So, starting a sentence with so, without an apostrophe is usually grammatically incorrect. To have near adjacent sentences structured the same is almost a shot in the foot; your own foot.

Similarly put your makeup on repeats in their sentences in immediate closeness. This, too, should be avoided. We know you put your makeup on and the relationship degrades your piece.

When the gentleman that approached you at the bar offered a drink, you should have told him what you would prefer.

Your tale is GOOD. Your writing needs some work.

The tendency is to over-explain, almost to the point of seeming to simply build your word numbers simply by repition.

Better editing will improve the quality of your writing. Your fertile immigration is ideal to creating porn that is relateable, follows logical sequence albeit somewhat quickly, and achieves a positive conclusion.

Looking forward to more, really appreciate the brevity.

did you go with no shoes on? surely 5 or 6 inch heels were needed for this outfit...

Love this story, chapter two will be good,

The thrill of the first time dressed in public is hard to beat. It is a milestone accomplishment for many

The story is lovely and maybe benefit from a good helper but when someone tells you that they should at least check their own "Your fertile immigration ' 😂😂😂

I really enjoyed your story and was very excited and was rubbing my clit the whole time 😁 I love flirting and a good fuck 😊

brought back fond memories