by tyler8n
Oh, you simply must tell us the repercussions of that text. Nice story. A bit short, but still nice. I'll give you a five, not the least of which, is for potential.
Jedd
Good story. Lots of potential. But you said the guy was 27 years old and then made him a snot-nosed kid. Aren't 12 to 14 year olds the only ones who say 'chicks' anymore?
Good premise.
But rushed.
Particularly the sex.
Needed it to slow down.
Boom. Cock in mouth.
He's enamored with her breasts, why doesn't he tell her how? Show her how? Why doesn't she ask him whether he'd really like them bigger since most guys do? Why doesn't he worship them? Kiss them? Play with her nipples? Suck them?
Why doesn't he play with her pussy and make her orgasm a few times -- with details?
Etc.
Four stars.