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AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
I cannot abide crap story's

where the would-be writer thinks that they can make the Reader part of the action!

Since the Reader knows that they were NOT part of the action it is not possible to believe any part of the 'story'

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Don't write in second person

It's annoying. It's like you are telling the story to the person it is about. Why would you do that? I stopped reading after the first paragraph. Use first or third person, it makes much more sense.

HughJohnson66HughJohnson66about 4 years agoAuthor
Thank you for the Feedback

I am new to this genre of writing. This story actually was written for someone in particular and sent to her. I thought it would make a good addition to the site. I will heed your advice moving forward.

Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

BADLY WRITTEN - EYESORE To read

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Older fellow into some random stuff. I am curious about a lot, but haven't had the opportunity to explore all of my kinks.

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