by regularguy13
Your story pulled me in early, and I enjoyed the character interaction. The idea of a young man getting a sex education by an older woman is a very exciting idea. You had me… the quick way you closed out the tale left me wanting. But I enjoyed the story regardless. Nice writing…
That was an odd circumstance, but made a good story...you rushed through like the rookie you said you were!
I hate to give it a bad score, because the build up was perfect, but then you dropped the ball. It felt like you got tired of writing and just put it to bed! There are so many places that you could have gone with the story, but you just didn’t. Started out being a 5, but Giving it a 3 for the good start!
Maybe a part 2, could redeem you!
I really liked the story, but you spent 90% of the time on 10% of the story then just rushed through what could have been the really good part.