All Comments on 'I Told You Not To Be Here!'

awesome. great. want more.

With a very nice twist at the end. Nice in the sense of well done, I mean.

Completely gruesome and oh so appropriate!

That was chilling. Really good writing. Never once did I feel 'out' of the story, looking in. I've been reading the contest entries, and this is the best of the lot yet. Well done.

A great story for Halloween. Good luck in the contest.

OMG!!! Was so not expecting that - you should write for the movies - so much better than the shit they dish out for horror - and the sex scenes were hot too!!!

God couldn't think of anything original. Saw this on Fright Night 3 years ago on TV.

And I *really* didn't anticipate the ending. I guessed she was daddy's little girl, but had no idea she'd murder her beloved (curses! I should have seen it a long way off). Good quality writing, will read more of your work.

That absolutely made me shudder the entire time.

A totally creepy story. I loved how you showed how much in love the two characters were and then the twist ending just ruins it all. So good.

Thankgod halloween isn't for months; the chills I have now are bad enough. I enjoyed the thrill of this so much, I read it out to my Fiance. Whom, enjoyed it also. Thumbs up, on a wonderful piece. More's the pity I wasn't back on Lit enough to vote on this in 2007.

Great story I could definitely see this as a full fledged movie.

O.o didn't expect that!