All Comments on 'I Win at the End'

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But you're a better writer than this little diddy. Perhaps you were both drunk AND in a hurry when you wrote it? I guess my biggest question was why SHE wasn't arrested for stealing the taxi? It could have been her, right? More likely the cops review cameras in the area the cab was stolen and Mark, the Neanderthal, is going to jail. (Or was it Mark that has his heritage in the Netherlands?). Nice try though.

A bad idea that just keeps raising it's ugly head.

Took a second read, but I got it. Very, very funny.

this story is funny and that is all... Not a thesis...4

"Neanderthal ascent" - Given some of the other lines, I'm assuming this was done intentionally for humor?

Or the neighbor? Or the old lady down the street? This plot relied on the argument that police are too dumb to live.

AMerryman 2.0

Excellent within the 750 words limit. Great humorous piece.

I like it... it makes me lough. "I am of Neanderthal ascent" takes the prize...

I did the 750 word challenge, but can say I will not likely do anything that short again. This story had funny promise, and could have been better if more properly cleaned up and fleshed out. Thanks for giving me a chuckle this morning.

Generally , Very Funny but I don't get WHY they arrested the 'ticket giver' without some evidence, or at least reasonable cause to suspect he was driving. It is a giant leap from finding it in his yard to proving he was driving. Perhaps a little 'storytime 'evidence like the 'ex' asking him what time he got home from the pub when the cops arrived! That might have cleared up the gap! I loved the' take a cab' advice! and the 'snow angel... :-) Good story for so few words

On what grounds would her lover be arrested? Without a witness or any reason to do so. Just doesn’t add up.

there is always a down side, there just has to be and always will. TK U MLJ LV NV

It's supposed to be short joke. It's not meant to be great literature. Some of you people probably dissect your kid's knock knock jokes.

Because ex Mark de Spot..Liked it

That got a good laugh reminds of collage took a cab sit in front of .cop bar and drove some home .Would have love to see there faces in roll call the next day .When they heard of a stolen cab.

People from the Netherlands are Dutch, not Neanderthals.

I too am ascended from Dutch Neanderthals and approve of this story.

... because it is inhabited by Neanderthals... Now i get it...

The Neanderthal is a valley in Germany where the first fossils of our extinct cousins were found.

The editing in this was atrocious. I usually don't care much about that, but this was as if the author was not a native English-speaker. But his other stories are good?

This story was cute, and I had great fun reading it. You remember when your camera was a Kodak Brownie box? Of course not, you assume that everyone has an iCam or the equivalent and takes pics as though there was no tomorrow. I'll bet you it wasn't so long ago that the NWT (that's the Northwest Territories of Canada, you know, the Yukon and stuff like that) had taxis sans cameras. Remember Chaplin eating bootlaces and boot soles, wishing they were steak and spaghetti, in *Modern Times*? I bet he would have grabbed a cab and there wouldn't be a still camera in sight. Nor a cop in sight to arrest him, And this was a 30s flick picturing the Gold Rush. (I may have my movies mixed up here, that's my Alzheimer's light. So sue me.) Who says that this story happened after smartphones?

Thanks anyway, likegoodwine. I loved it. 5 stars.

You have too much unnecessary rubbish and not enough of what was actually important to such a short story. By my MS Word it has 749 words, not 750.

Nothing the least bit erotic here. Your grade D+ only because it was semi humorous.

and to the anon who complained about no sex be quiet and enjoy it

Too hurried at end to properly frame loverboy

Neanderthal? The Netherlands? Those 2 are not the same

That was hilarious !!

next time just eat.

Someone leaves a stolen cab on your front lawn and you're arrested. Just plain silly.

I couldn't figure out the symbol left in the snow and don't understand why Brad was arrested. Obviously, I am way over the hill. A little help?

I liked the ‘took a cab’ joke (stole a cab & picked up passangers who paid enough to cover my barbill.).

If you’ve lived in Barbados your whole life, you will never understand ‘snow angels... unless you make ‘sand angels’ on the beach.

Unless Brad shovelled the walk after the snow, there would be some footprint trail away from the house. And your Ex would be a witness of his continuous (and enthusiastic) presence in your former bed.

Too many irrelevant (dead-end) pieces, like the Neaderthal (vice Nordic) comment. Had zippo to do with the story. (Maybe if the cab were a Volvo?)

4* and moderately generous, at that.

You must only have a 15 minute lunch break? See the following:

"My wife cheated on me so I framed her lover for auto theft and he got arrested!"

See....the whole story could have been done in 17 words on a coffee break and you would still have time for a second cup! BTW....if he was a cop there is no way he would have been arrested if someone left a stolen car on his lawn!

He's a Neanderthal!

...enjoyed this one. 4 stars. Thanx!

Loklie

Ennek a sotrynak se füle se farka, egy értelmetlen , elspórolt katyvasz!

those fron the Netherlands are refereed to as Dutch

Neanderthals are a separate species

4 stars

Punishment stolen cab for stealing wife

A lot of people commenting made note of the Neanderthal 'error'. I have to admit I thought the same thing. Considering the tongue-in-cheek nature of the story, I have a feeling the use of the word was very much intentional. After all, I kind of doubt "Mark de Spot" is a dutch name.

To the author kudos for your story. It was so over the top I'm still trying to wrap my head around it.

Bit tongue off

2 stars

HarryVag is so smart. Netherlands is like a country or something. Neanderthal is a Democrat , but with intelligence.

Thanks for making me chuckle. It’s nice to have a fun story every once in a while.

Great short story! Loved it!

Great story!

LOL!

I'm laughing at 26thNC's comment.

Just like that? Grand theft auto? And no prints from Brad inside the taxi? And no video camera surveillance from anywhere? Ok. Some of your stories are just not developed. This one was just plain stupid....

People from the Netherlands are not of "Neanderthal ascent"(sic)

Hahaha...clever man

Good grief people! It is all for fun! Lighten up!

How does that charge stick?

Reminds me of my brother in how he took his mother's words re taking a cab. However, my brother died while serving life with no possibility of parole!

That made no sense. How did the frame work?

Wow, that was kind of stupid, and wordy, and pointless.

Descent, not ascent. Neanderthals are not from the Netherlands.