by Chrisrov
You know a really good story when you're disappointed it ends. More please and longer.
An excellent story and I can't wait for more. Please continue.
Let's see where this goes. My favorite kind of story. 3-4 pages would be good.
Unless I miss my mark the MH-53 Pave Low III is a USAF bird. Or was until it was replaced with the CV-22 I Osprey. Damned good start!!!
3 stars
DragonRider55 Tsgt USAF Retired
USAF put them in service in 2009
Anonymous
01/06/20
Trivia
Unless I miss my mark the MH-53 Pave Low III is a USAF bird. Or was until it was replaced with the CV-22 I Osprey.
I noticed a few grammar and spelling errors that threw me off, and a few paragraphs of what you wrote didn't make a lot of sense. If you need an editor, I'd be glad to volunteer.
That being said, it's a good story and still gets 5 stars from me, can't wait to read the other chapters.
I think the only author on Lit that writes better Military scenes (that I have read) is ScreamingEagle101
https://literotica.com/beta/s/champions-vol-01
I admire your courage writing in a modern military setting. The critics in this genre are assholes and are ready to pounce at everything you get wrong. I say Fuck them and just write a good story and thanks for your time. Keep writing please.