All Comments on 'I'll Do Anything Pt. 01'
by magnusdieb
- 6 Comments
Anonymousabout 5 years agoFYI, You'll have more credibility if you spell Sergeant correctly
Anonymousabout 5 years agoWith anon #2 on the spelling. Anon what the fuck is a slot burn? Decent story. Dialogue is a tad inane. I guess you've never been in the military. One doesn't take a subordinate directly to the Commander. Decent first effort tho. Hoping chap 2 is as good as this without the mentioned issues.
2 stars
DragonRider55 Ret USAF Tsgt
Anonymousabout 5 years agoYour right, one wouldn't take the airman directly to the commander. In this case the Sergeant wasn't... maybe anon #3 missed the second paragraph.
"In fact, he wasn't planning on going into the Commander's office at all. He only wanted to scare the young airman into keeping better control over her weapon, after all he did like her. "
Anonymousabout 5 years agoThe whole story about the wife? Quickly followed by tzlking about how lucy ate and exercized? Plus the grammatical mistakes- it made me laugh lore than anything
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoIf you going to criticize someone for their mistakes, don't make any...
"tzlking" "it made me laugh lore than anything"
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