All Comments on 'Impact of Collision Ch. 05'

Sarah’s submission caught me off guard after dumping the boyfriend because she didn’t want to control him.

I’m surprised she’s letting Claire do this!

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I'm the person who lives in the building across from Claire's room. I thought I dreamed the "show" from the night before when I wole up the next morning, but to my suprise and voyeuristic delight, the ladies were back at it bright and early. This time it was even more erotic, with one of them appearing to dominate the other. I "enjoyed" the show, but had a party to organize, so reluctantly left them to their play. Incredibly, later that day, or rather night, I encountered them again at the party I helped organize, They stuck out due to their ethnicity, their beauty, and their now recognizable dresses that apparently are the only outfits they own. And of course they put on a "show". One of them was a total slut and came right in the middle of the crowd. The crowd even cheered them on. Now if that weren't enough; after the party was over and I was relaxing by a window, I happened to notice lights on in an apartment across the street, and wouldn't you know it,: there are the beautiful, one outfit lesbian? exhibitionists getting freaky again. This time there was no mistaking the D/s dynamics. The one used the other like her personal slut slave. The ladie's "shows" keep getting hotter and kinkier. I'm definitely going to keep an eye on the room across from the building where I live. Their next "show" should be incredible. I hope the dominant one aquires a strap-on and makes the submissive one her pleasure bitch. 👁👁👁👁👁

Not really loving where this installment is going. I was hoping to see a deeper emotional connection between Sarah and Claire, maybe coming to terms with a budding relationship. All the slut stuff didn’t do it for me. Personal opinion though.

This started as a path finding and discovery story, and is becoming a verbally and physically abusive story, which is not what I came for. Sadly, this means that the current chapter was my last.

Please tell me there will be more to the story! So sexy!! I love the characters.

The writing is so good!

it was going somewhere great.

And then the over the top and d/s stuff started.

Oh well.

I enjoyed this story and the characters, though I am low level concerned at the corner being turned around the level of D/S shown without proper dialogue between the partners (and therefore lack of consent between the two). I find lack of consent an immediate turn off, but more than that for me - it was completely out of the characters you’ve built and exposed us to in the 4 proceeding chapters. I’m not sure where exactly the story is headed, so I can’t say for sure it’s heading down shaky ground, but my advice is to tread carefully. You have a really good story, but one small move could see all your hard work undone.

Love this collaborative storyline that could easily play out on stage in front of an audience — just imagine the encounters from spilled wine to outrageously erotic, screaming “slut” sex. When you think about the content of your chapters, almost all of the defining scenes/moments are easily depicted on stage — OK, the highly erotic sex (finally for crying out loud) of this and previous chapter would definitely be “off broadway”, but not the personal intensity you create. A “stage” perspective would highlight the romantic comedy inherent in this storyline. Even this chapter’s intense, immersive sex scene is more easily/deeply appreciated as outrageous and within context of the storyline if one can imagine the scene played out in front of an audience. Otherwise the language and attitude might border on abuse and might offend/detract for some. In context, what Claire wanted is what Sarah wanted simply in a highly charged moment (comedic is for some a stretch) more easily appreciated on stage. OK, probably overthinking this provocative journey. Enjoying in any case.

So good as always! Love the characters and this is definitely one of my favorite storylines to follow. And I am totally fine with the direction others are complaining about. Life’s not perfect and people have flaws. Let them work it out Pollyannas.

Enjoying the story with a rising level of love and life and will be waiting with expectations for the next episode to be good as well….thanks

A well-crafted tale. For those who think the story all of a sudden became d/s, I would suggest that you read with the wide-eyed naïveté of a jeune Sarah.

Different Story?

I am unsure where or where the original intent was in developing this story, however this chapter was a bit difficult for me to read. I started reading it 1-hour after it was posted, then put it away for a while after the seemingly very dark twist crept into Sarah's / Claire's relationship.

The writing remains excellent, however the storyline took too much of a dark turn for my taste. This chapter went beyond a gentle or playful spanking to almost intensely mean, spiteful or hurtful actions and language by Claire.

CH. 05's characters appeared to be dramatically different Sarah's / Claire's!!

CH. 05 was definitely not the real cute / fun read as CH. 01-04

I'm not understanding some of the comments. Did people not recognize the avant garde bohemian world that Claire was introducing young Sarah to. Couple that with the alcohol assisted demolition of inhibitions and the repressed sexual personas of each woman- (Claire dominant, Sarah submissive, both lesbian)- that were suddenly given free reign, and everything seems to be developing quite organically and believably. The sex scenes were undeniably erotic, and them being far from vanilla cookie cutter is a huge positive imho. I have read many boilerplate lesbian romance stories, and while enjoyable, they can get predictable and repetative at times. When a story pops up that is edgy, with a final form that has yet to be determined, I would hope that other readers would give the writers some latitude before bailing or ragging on it. I am here for whatever the author's imaginations devise. The overall quality and creativity of this story is faaaaar better than most. JMTCW

I'd like to thank you all for taking the time to read these chapters and respond. I have enjoyed reading your comments, even the challenging ones.

To all those who have said that this story is heading down the D/S path and it's not what you signed up for - I'm sorry you feel that way, but I'm sure you can find another story that will float your boat. I want to thank you for your time with us, I sincerely hope that you do come back for the rest of the journey.

I do not want you all to get the wrong idea that this is a D/S story, because it's not. Until now, I hadn't wanted to impose my view of the characters as I want this to be a journey of discovery for you, that said I hope you can be open minded to both women, they may do things you do like, they may not be what you imagine them to be, but they are as perfectly imperfect as characters; flawed people.

I will let you into my views, personally I hate Rom-Coms. I despise the manufactured nature of their meetings, the contrived nature I've met this person they are so wonderful - oh wait they're trying to shut me down. I loathe that the paramours are often in direct competition and that is where the hurdles manifest - someone has to lose. I detest how everything is so obvious to everyone else but the couple. I abhor the "airport dash" (God couldn't help you if you cut in front of me - and worse if you cause my flight to be delayed). Just like in a Rom-Com, Fate intercepted and ensured that it was the genre assigned to me for the micro-fiction contest which birthed this story. No matter how much I hated Rom-Coms, the thing that makes this pleasurable for me is writing it with SiteNonSite, that and considering it more of a Rom-Cum (props to SiteNonSite for coming up with that term). I would not want to be doing this with anyone else.

The way I see this story, is it's a story of love, a new love, a challenging and thought provoking love, an undefined love, a confusing love, a love of art, a love of food, a messy love, a sexy love, a love of friends. It is complicated and messy and at times it can be confusing and frustrating. Sometimes I want to reach into the page and shake some sense into Sarah, she is so intelligent, but at times is so naive and inexperienced. It is nothing more than two women who have had chance meetings getting to know each other better in many ways. There are power imbalances in this relationship, but in my view many relationships have an imbalance of power (which doesn't imply D/S) and that power may shift - or not. Things can get said and done in the heat of a moment, which throws all that into a tailspin. That's why these characters are fascinating (to me) - they are flawed.

Something SiteNonSite said in a comment on their post, that had resonated with me, was them talking about their pleasure of confusion: "the pleasure that comes from a limited POV, from depending on a not entirely reliable narrator."

I will reiterate that this is a story by SiteNonSite & I, we write this for our enjoyment and chose to share it with you. I could go on about how much love and respect I have for SiteNonSite and how it is a privilege to be able to do this with them, to learn from them, to watch their writing process and to have their constant support and encouragement... but I digress, this is not intended to be my love letter to them.

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To the anonymous voyeuristic reader who lives across the street from Claire, in regards to the clothes, to be fair they do have more than one outfit, but you caught them on a night they just ended up at Claire's place, it was unplanned, so poor Sarah didn't have clothes at Claire's place. In regards to your D/S requests or fantasy, sorry it's not where this is headed, but at least you have a room with a view.

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Ash_legend, thank you for your concerns. I hope that we don't turn you off too much, but I will say this, the next chapters will be a little tumultuous.

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Migbird, the stage "show" concept is somewhat interesting. I have previously mentioned that I see parts of this story as a movie in that way it is so visual. There are a lot of references to artists who have provided some level of inspiration. This chapter Pretty/Dirty was also the title of an exhibition of Marilyn Minter (the artist talk). I know we took our sweet time to get to the highly erotic sex, I hope the long tease was worth that wait.

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Billyslate, I am curious to understand how you view Sarah's character as having changed?

I have hesitated about commenting on this chapter. I didn't like the power dynamic in this chapter and my first reaction was to dislike Claire for it. I hope that I'm not wrong when I have noticed glimpses of caring and vulnerability underneath her exterior. I'm stopping short of calling this abuse, because so far I see Sarah as a willing participant. However, I am worried that Sarah is so in thrall to Claire that she would do anything Claire asked.

I know it’s been said several times already, but I was saddened and confused by the turn this story has taken. There was zero indication this was coming, and without consent, it’s plain verbal abuse. My face is still screwed up in confusion, and honestly, disgust. I was enjoying this series up to this point.

It seems that at least part of expressing sadness and disgust is performative, since no one has reached out to ButteredCrumpet or I to express these feelings privately, and as you acknowledge, ArmyGal33, the same thing has already been said any number of times.

Many readers have reached out privately because they are confused - which is understandable. Sarah’s POV is limited, but you don’t even know all she knows, all you know is what she tells you. That is by design. It’s meant to be part of the fun. For myself, I enjoy the feeling of being lost within a story and trying to orient myself, to guess where the author is heading. I enjoy it even more when an author truly surprise me.

But maybe that’s not the problem either. Perhaps the problem is you want a RomCom with pornographic sex scenes rather than cut ways to fireworks. That’s not what we are doing. I really enjoy pornography because of the way it places bodies front and center. So rather than a RomCom with the sexy bits showing, this is an opportunity to tell a love story through the sex. That means the sex is the conflict. The sex is the misunderstanding. The sex is the catharsis.

I have no idea if ButteredCrumpet and I will succeed with this, but it’s a pleasure to try. It’s been confusing and at times a little scary (there have been tears), but it’s also a very fun challenge.

I wish rather than pearl clutching you had read our responses to the other comments like yours and given us the benefit of the doubt. Having gotten this far into the story, I’d hope you’d want to see it through, I’m sorry you don’t, but I do hope you find something else to read that’s more to your liking.

Love this series and I hope you continue it! I do think we need to see Sarah get off a little more, and sometime, she needs to say no to Claire, but with a smile!

Oh yes they doing well and it feels not like speeding more just taken time exploring enjoying talking eating tasting smiling sharing , just name it and this feels sooooo good just reading this slow burning get together ...... Just lovely

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