All Comments on 'In the Jungle Ch. 01'

Very good! I'm loving the point - counterpoint style you're taking this story in and look forward to where you got with it.

I'm liking the story. Looking forward to more.

Loved the story and build up. Strong characters, can't wait for the next chapter, how soon please?? Thanks

Awesome beginning. Great quality writing and intriguing story. Please continue and I look forward to the next chapter. 5 stars!

This is a great start to a very interesting series. One small improvement I'd suggest is removing some contents of page 5, most of which is somewhat extraneous.

I've already written chapter 2, and part of chapter 3. There is nothing extraneous on the final page. Maybe I was too subtle with the setup for the pirates and uncontacted natives, but shit's about to go down.

I'll post it when I'm done with the other, higher rated stories.

Yes, really love your contest. 5 stars from me on all three submissions however this story, In The Jungle, is my favorite. That said, i'd really like to see the long version ending of all three stories. Great job!

Let me worship at your loom... Kowtowing (in slow motion)... I like this one a bit less than the others but it's still an interesting and captivating tale. I generally don't like the double narrative unless it's to reveal something interesting or unique that wasn't brought up in the original narrative, otherwise it eventually begins to be repetitive information. So far you've managed to avoid being redundant, but just barely. With that being said I still want to know how this story ends and I'm very tempted to give it five stars becauseof that.

I would love to see the story build up. You have a great plot starting. Also a suggest that you can drive the story forword from Anabeth's point of view rather than repeating almost ever thing .

Again great story keep it up.

I really love almost all you stories. :-)

Enjoyed the story and description of the jungle. The author also appears to know a great deal about the varied subject matter. I loved it and gave it f stars! I am anxiously waiting for the next chapter.

Like the title says, I think the story was well written. Your two main characters are developing nicely, You have lots of sex play in there, but have shown you're not afraid to separate them and add in plot and story elements. I've now read all your works, and would rate them as:

1) Monsters in the Mountains 5*

2) Suck in the Moment 5*

3) In the Jungle 4*

4) Lost and Found 4*

I like this story line almost as much as the Bigfoot one. It would be great to get to read more.

Hay bud thought it was cool adventurous. Awesome start getting to know the characters to wanting more of the story

I can't wait for more.

Dude, you gotta continue these Tales. Very good reading until you realize it will be unfinished.

Please? More?

Yobo

Please, please finish this one when you get a chance!

Really hope you can find the time to continue writing. You have a gift! Would like to see a continuation of the story.

Thanks

Good start to...

11/10!!!!!

promising other than that "Columbia" is in DC or Canada ... better attention to detail needed

Excellent story.

For those readers asking for more, I believe that it was stated on another story, that the author has unfortunately passed away.

My condolences to the family and friends