All Comments on 'In The Shower'

A continuation of the story?

Starting an erotic story more or less on a sexual climax usually leaves this reader quite cold --.as this story also did.

Longig, lust, uncertainty and tension (aka 'build-up') on the other hand ...

The text on a cup-a-soup packet is more erotic than this.

But, then again they do have a point.

Maybe flesh this out and resubmit it.

I was surprised, nay, shocked to learn that a pelvis can spread, and even more so that it can enter between a woman's vaginal lips. I guess I have a lot to learn.

Or the writer could learn some English grammar so they can write something less riddled with confusing sentences.

Remember, grammar and punctuation are tools to be used, not ignored.

It's not his sister,it's his sister-in-law.

That kills the story. Thats not incest.