All Comments on 'Indian Harem Ch. 01'

Good story. But some character could be platonic.

Build up is nice continue the good work

Such an awesome start

I was almost about to close the story after reading the first two paragraphs but something asked me to keep reading and boy was in a surprise.

The 1st scene captures the past, the conflict within the family, the dynamics of the relationships and the comfort of the characters well. Kudos to the author for making the exposition so interesting and detailed without explaining.

Although the 2nd scene with Pooja is hot, it is nothing more than a jerk off material than a scene in a story. (If as an author you are trying to establish a romantic connection I’d suggest you let the tension buildup with a mix foreplay, hesitation, reluctance, lust and love).

I am heading to read further since your story has potential.

Hoping for something better in the second part.

~ Ruby Black