by doindia
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh man.. can't wait 4 long..... always drooling to read more n more ...... nice story... bt hv to wait 4 a day long to get next part.....
Hi, Your story theme is good - and so far your portrayal of threesome sex between two males and 1 female is good - though could be more descriptive. However, your story could do with a tighter editing and more importantly, the usage of English language. We are not reading literature - granted - but still the language has to be correct. Presently, regret to say, it is not so.
I look forward to further developments in your story.
Dear Commentators !
I love to thanks about all yours comments on this story,
Keep reading and Comment also, More parts are under approval, and soon they are here 4 your pleasure.
Do love U all,
Yours,
doindia
INDIA