All Comments on 'Inferno Pt. 02'

I don't generally like incest stories so I'll pass which is too bad since I could have used a sequel.

Thanks for writing, even if I'm not your target audience.

I do not want such family for myself. DNA test is almost 100% sure,so Jacy and Kenneth could test themselfes and they could get married.

Not really incest if "daddy" isn't really your father. But the story was well structured and the characters were interesting and I am a sucker for a happy ending. Shakespeare, BTW, defined a happy ending as one in which three quarters of the cast weren't dead.

Please tell me more about blueberry "compost".

I couldn't finish reading. It was too boring.

Excellent character development – I was actually interested in them and went back to read parts that I might have misread. Would have liked to see ken marry daughter but hey – that is your story. “Mary pray for me” – you must be Catholic – like the way you worked that in. 5

Once I got the names straightened out I found it to be an enjoyable story. A five.

Yeeeecccccccccchhhhhhhh!

Be careful what one asks for. When many comments praised the initial story yet demanded this story be extended. Frankly the villains had been vanquished or humiliated by end of premier effort & remained in submissive, beta status for this one .

There was a void in dramatic tension & the only suspense was whether Kenneth was going to realize that Daddy's girl had a raging Electra complex.

I gave the initial effort five stars & won't vote on this one out of respect for the author. Two stars , however, is my assessment.

Scouries handles these quasi and real father-daughter couplings with much more élan . Irregardless of this one submission, I consider this author a very unique talent and eagerly await his next story.

but nothing was added to original plot other than a long walk down recon road. Don't run or hide from anonymous it is beneath you and makes this site more boring.

When I saw this was a long story I thought I'd scan a page or so. Especially since I was satisfied with the conclusion to "Inferno".

Before I realized it I was on the last page wishing there was more - much more! What a heartwarming story of human frailties, consequences, and well earned redemption. BRAVO

Thanks for the story . I enjoyed it very much .

Great conclusion to a great story!!

As Kenneth said, he was two people. I really enjoyed both parts....all the small details that really made the story.....Jellissa and Jadia, how they were exactly like Jennifer. Pebbles the cat, etc. So, Ann did the Judge's house....but who kept up the pressure on her? JimBob44 has done a great job. Folks, Ice Heart is truly worth reading also.

Loved the poetic justice of Cecil getting roasted committing arson.

Thanks for finishing it.

You handled a large number of characters well. There were stories within stories within stories-I never knew what the next paragraph would hold.

Thanks for posting this segment

A lot of writing had to go into this story for the author to be able to tell this epic tale.

A well planned and thought out storyline, and a well written story.

I may be reading something into the story that isn't there, but Jennifer never did tell who Jacy's biological father is, and I was wondering if Kenneth might be her real father.

Thanks for the good read...

Even with some of the flow being choppy, meaning time jumps and a few punctuation errors, nothing took away from the plot which was solid. Good job and keep it up.

But I nearly marked it down because of your obvious but incredibly confusing dislike of anon users. Leave them the fuck alone. You don't like what they say, ignore it. Some anon users may be idiots, but the vast, I repeat VAST, majority of readers liking and commenting and admiring your work are also anon. Take the good with the bad. The fucking internet was built on anon users, and putting some fucking stupid nonsensical and contrived name on a comment does not in any way identify the reader anyway... you seem to have been around long enough to realise all of this. So the whining at the end of your story does NOT suite you, or your writing, and in fact cheapens the experience for the reader. It's just not necessary. Go back to your amazing writing ability and keep pumping out these awesome stories. Leave the fucking complaining to idiotic readers like me, and anon.

JB44,

Thanks for sharing it on Lit.

x

This had a very different tone to me than Inferno did. Much brighter, more optimistic. A good ending.

Have to agree with another comment was more positve than Inferno but both well written and good reads.

Especially appreciate you putting an ending! I was dissappointed at the end of Inferno since was not sure if more to come or that was it. Felt like the end of too many JPB stories! Dissappointed and lacking

So THANK YOU for more on these characters and a good ending to me!

Please keep posting and I will keep reading!

Only thing is: What about the Title ? I mean this is more like "Denver Clan" then "Rage". Yes you did through in a few fires in the end to justify the title but come on ^^

go thru shit and get turned around....as one. TK U MLJ LV NV

i read this befoer and loved it. daddy is one hell of an ass kicker.

And mostly well suited couples -

Too many kids take too long to understand who their parents are (forget DNA) and the value they represent -

Well written - good sympathetic main characters and good evil characters to counter balance -

The Incest isn't obviously - no blood relatives connect -

Nice job thanks

But for a substantial portion of this story, I was cringing. I made the mistake of reading this right after 'Inferno'. So I went from loving daughter to 'loving' daughter...and my insides curdled.

I guess I am not the target demo for incest stories.

Maybe Jacy and Kenneth could get DNA tested, and have him belatedly removed as father from her birth certificate... would that clear the way to their marriage? Is it even possible?

I just loved this story (and the first part, too).

What can I say? Gross!

fun read

I liked it much better than Inferno but this story was not as powerful. This one was more pleasant. They could get Jennifer (when she was in a good mood) to give the name of Jacy's father and then get blood tests. Jennifer came out if it much better than she deserved, I was glad to see that Ann finally honored Kenneth as her father. Thank you for writing.

Good un

I just read ten pages and the tale didn't have any kind of conclusion. I would resent the father/daughter dalliance except they weren't blood, thanks to a chronic cheating slut wife. This could be a mini-series. However it's not finished. I give five stars for the quality writing but I wish there was more.

Jacy and Elizabeth had the same father

DQS is a wonderful writer but your stories seem to be about real people and I always feel better about the world after reading one and I don't always feel that way after I read a DQS.

...and I don't have time to read ten pages at a crack. Maybe I'll read the entire story sometime, but you may want to consider 3-page chapters in the future, to give your readers a breakpoint at lunchtime.

DNA testing will show that Ken is not Jacy's father. Then they can petition a court for an Adjudication of Facts of Parentage and have Jacy's birth records changed to remove Ken as father. If Jennifer is really serious about wanting to change her ways, she claims to have known who Jacy's real father is all along and can provide the name. There is NO legal reason why Jacy cannot have a legal marriage to Ken.

a story line that is supposed to be titillating because of incest, but he is not her father.

a nice guy, yet he has killed at least three men in prison, possibly six.

an ex who has no conscience, but late in life develops regrets and seems to actually care about others.

then, of course, there is the Kenneth Kay house burning playbook.

oh well, maybe it is a good thing you have chosen to stop submitting stories because your boss caught you using the company computer to write this mediocre stuff.

Like some of the other commentators, I like the character development. Since father daughter were not related, am ok with that. I really like what Ann did to the bitch judge. The only critique I would offer is that I wish JB44 had put in a couple of ethical and honest black guys - balance out the bad ones.

The first part of this story was so dark, I almost didn't read this part. I'm so glad I did, though. In fact I wouldn't mind seeing a part three (hint, hint).

But a 5 is what it is =

Well designed of way off beat - every person in it is a caricature of a flawed human heh

The single best person in it is Jacy with Eric a close second. The nargain barn folks are extreme but nice top.

The system is flawed so they behave as it demands - to an extent - nice work -

Just great.

Loved it. More please.

I was hoping that Jennifer would sign an affidavit that Jacy was not Kenneth's daughter so Jacy and Kenneth could get married. Thank you for writing this entertaining story.

To the critics: How many good stories have YOU written recently?

Would have been nice closure if Jennifer admitted who Jacy's biological father was as part of her redemption process.

I don't think Jennifer IDing Jacy's biological father would have been good writing - the observation that she's saying she's sorry but doesn't know what she's sorry about really rang true about her and I don't think for her to give the name would fit that character.

Of course, since most of Jimbob44's stories are interconnected, if you've read The Broussard Sisters through around Chapter 6 then some dialogue in Inferno identifies Jacy's biological dad for you.

Every man knows during the last trimester of his wife's pregnancy and afterwards, the new mothers are emotionally a basket case. The are always extremely uncomfortable, are sleep deprived, their hormones are all over the place. It is very common to see a huge change in their personality during this time.

fantastic.... all the parts of this story , very edgey at times but luring you to want more ... excellent writing and setup... wow , thankyou for sharing

Jacy describes how she was eating French Toast fingers for breakfast by saying:

". . . . she picked one up, dunked it into the blueberry compost . . . "

And since most commercial grade "compost" is a mixture of wood chips and cow poop,

Please tell me you meant Compote??

Compote (French for "mixture") is a dessert originating from medieval Europe, made of whole or pieces of fruit in sugar syrup. Whole fruits are cooked in water with ...

it hadn't gone quite so far over the top

Love stories that are set in the same world, use chars from other stories. If i hadn't read the story about Lily and Annies flower shop, it would have been a throw away line, having read it...just makes it great.

I suspect "Daddy" could have had himself removed from Jacy's birth certificate and then legally married his "daughter".

What bothered me about the story was the complete lack of concern on Ken's part that he was removing his "daughter" from the appropriate marriage, lifetime partner pool by starting a relationship with her. When she is 45 and in the prime of her life, he will be decrepit. There should have at least been some discussion and argument before he finally gave in.

Thanks for writing!

in concept, but with a cast of so many characters, it could have been a star wars movie. I sometimes lost who was who.

Great wrap up of a fun read. Nice to see Cecil got justice. (Was he the one who drove the judge crazier? Or was it Jadia? Smell of gas, right...)

Three in one day-ish? A very busy time, indeed.

This was a delight to read, even with the hormonal imbalances driving Jacy's actions and moods. You did a very nice job wrapping up the loose ends.

Thank you for the nice ending to a truly great story.

I have read this story a couple of times and do like it. I especially enjoy the remorse that finally seems to show up in Jennifer. For her to truly prove she was sorry for how she acted, and to get herself back into the lives of her daughters and grandchildren, all she would have to do is file a corrected birth certificate for Jacy. If she amends the birth certificate with the correct father's name, then Jacy and Kenneth can get married.

I don't how inclusive the state laws are regarding non-bloodrelated family members, but couldn't Jacy and Kenneth get married if they had a DNA test done to prove that they are not related by blood?

For that matter, I found it a bit weird that Kenneth never had paternity tests done on the girls when they were younger, just to know for sure.

"And yet, even after posting this message on 'Inferno' I was deluged by 'Anonymous' spouting off their nonsensical, pointless, and quite often erroneous opinions.

I had to say they really should ban anon comments.

Everyone has the ability to disallow anonymous comments! It's in your Settings. When you posted yours, did you notice JimBob had set his so you had to be signed in?

Dang Man, glad everyone isn't a mess like a lot of your characters were. Thanks for getting Kenneth out of prison to continue your story. My only requested advice is to make some sign of a mark, like "~~~" or something to start a new change of the story like for a chapter or different characters exchanging info. Thanks!

seem to get along in all situations and thrive, TK U MLJ LV NV

"cuck in a closet"

A little surprised no one in the story thought it was weird though. I know they aren't blood related, but you would think some people in the story would find it messed up or at least weird that father and daughter were having kids together. I might be wrong because I skimmed, but no one even congratulates Kenneth on being a father? Do they even know?

Jimbob,

Just wanted to say thanks for the great stories that you put out.

Really enjoy your stories! Thank you!

Technically not incest, and the incest is the only thing I didn't care for in this story. Seems everyone got suddenly smarter after dumping Cecil. That boy lived way too long, But he died just perfectly, screaming like the bitch he was. Another great JB44 story.

Just an amazingly good story.

You are One of My Favorite writers here . Keep up the Great work

Adultery, stepparent incest, arson, prison, murder? Damn! The only way the story could have got any better is if that idiot Trump was in it.

This was my 2nd or 3rd reread (could have been 4th since my memory is not very good). I have no trouble remembering the name of good stories. When I get to the point that I can't remember the story details, I read it again. This is as good as the first read. THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST. 5*

5*

My favorite chapter in my favorite JimBob44 story!

Come back, we miss you!

~Enkidu

But Jacy was slowly turning into her mother for a while there. Becoming more and more of a selfish bitch, and nothing like the sweet girl of the previous story. She wasn't fucking around, but the shrill self centered me me me attitude was right there.

Hi,

I've just reread most of your stories here. Just want to say thanks for all the effort you've put into them, and for posting them up for viewing here. I have enjoyed most of the stories (everybody screws up once in a while) and, again, thanks.

Loving the story - one of the best I've read of yours. Not sure your fixation on the hero always being twice the age of the heroine, but hey, it works I guess. 5*

Jim Bobs Best Story . IMHO

is quite outstanding. This story shows an exceptional level of talent.

Gave it 5☆ Not your fault I have a short memory span. But all loose ends were tied up.

Great story, scores 5/5

Glad the asshole burned himself up!!! Get a DNA test on Jacy to prove no relation, then marry her!!!

Only that i hope he keeps writeing for his injoyment. Ours too. Thanks for your storeies sir. Keeps this old man from getting boried.

So we know the prick Cecil is the father of Ann's two sons. And we knew that Jennifer was running around with him for some time. Did we ever learn who were Jadia and Jelissa's biological father? It was implied that Jacy had a different biological father. There seemed to be some hints but nothing positive, yes?

I have to say I preferred Jacy's character in the first chapter. In this chapter she went from wanting her stepdad to OCD to more than a little neurotic. And why would a young woman that good in school and college end up as a receptionist m, especially when she has a house and a large nest egg from her grandparents?

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I also didn't get the conversion of Michael and Jennifer to suddenly giving a damn about anyone.

Anonymous, August 2022. I thought the first chapter had a judge being the two girls father.

made my jaded ass feel things a couple times in this chapter .

thank you .

Took it quickly to a gross place didn't you? Not a fan of part 2, couldn't finish reading it and won't hit 3 at all.

Good chapter! Glad Cecil’s out of the picture…. I expected him to go after Jacy.

Let us all spend a moment thinking about ole Cecil, it may well be even hotter for him where he's going ......

Third time and still loved it. Easy top five in LW category

Mmmm, hot, fresh donuts! Now ya got me craving fresh beignets from Cafe Du Monde’s in New Orleans… bastard! 😁😁

Totally screwy family. Onto part3 as it can't get any crazier.

I like Jack. She's cute, loyal, protective and nurturing. We should all be so lucky

When Eric told his wife about the fire at their place, my first thought was,, Ann’s at it again. But of course it wasn’t her, she was with Kenneth having a baby. Although it never was explained why she torched the judge’s house. Pretty damn good story, JB, thanks for all the effort you put into writing it. And for posting it here. Five stars.

Dee