by DG Hear
Its a spook story and you did tell a good tale , that venue isnt my cup of tea but as usual good writing .
Normally wouldn't be my type; I am not really in to fantasy stuff. This story seems to add the hint of humor I need to make a fun read for me. Good job as usual.
great read, well written, but hoped for more sex and a happy ending...
This was very well put together and logical, so we won't let a little problem of a supernatural event bother us. Why didn't he put his wife to the test in the first three Halloweens of their marraige? I think that he got tired of her!
Liked the change of pace and sort of humorous tone. Good job, thanks for your hard work.
Thanks to all who have commented. Just a short story for Halloween. Was a fun write.
with respect
DG
This is another great story from you. I liked how you got the story to end with you telling how the bodies appear in the pond. It was a nice twist on a halloween story.
Good way of dealing with cheating wives. Every man should have one of these.
though dont like death in stories, these are supposed to be, fantasies, i believe death is just easy way out from punishment, but how did he managed to do it three time and never got caught.
But regardless of anything it was good read, sometimes you write in same genre with JPB (eg, Reunion), otherwise you always give great read.
Thanx
I liked the supernatural element for Halloween and overall it was a clever story. Of course he was a slimeball because he was cheating too. And he got away with murder. Aren't the monsters supposed to die at the end of the story?
A nice fast paced story, with the Halloween theme. It's just a good spooky story that makes the reader think that Allen knows a lot more about the missing wives than he's letting on.
My theroy is: He knows where the peddle that operates the slab that opens up the freezer below the marble slab. then at the appropriate time he opens the bottom of the freezer that drops the body into the under water cave so it can be found .
I'm not much into the paranormal, but like to read of it. thanks for the good story.
This story is in wrong category--science fiction??
Thanks. This really in the spirit of the holiday.
I enjoyed the story, even though it lacked any emotion from the husband. He was colder than the slab.
Thanks.
wow this was bad .... it wasnt scary... it wasnt spooky and Police are Morons.
Where is Sherlock Holmes or Spenser when you them them?
...Tales from the Crypt. Very good!
DGH,
Thoughtful insight into the macabre mind of paranormal psycology....
Rain makes corn, corn makes whiskey
Assholes makes shit, shit still stinks
Great imagination. Hey how about Revenge on Grumpy Old Anonymous Assholes and Harry Assholes by their friends or wives who had enough!
Thanks for sharing on Lit.
x
DG, I thoroughly enjoyed your little halloween submission. If I were attempting to analyze it (I'm not.), I think I would subscribe to digdaddyrich's theory. I thought it was a really fun read. Thank you for another fine submission. You never dissappoint us.
For some reason I thought it wasn't going to have a supernatural ending since it was in the LW category. Boy! Was I ever pleasantly surprised, great story, great read, very unique. Thank you.
....in a just for fun submission. extreme clever you're not.
Loved the Intrigue and the Fact that he allowed Wifey to take test 2 minutes after. Great Holloween Story!
That was a very good story. I liked how you merged supernatural with this story. I also liked how you revealed the secret at the end. That was a nice part. Good Luck for contest.
Is anyone else wondering if the test recognizes Daylight Savings Time :-)
Loved the twist. Finding out about cheating with Cheryl was quite a surprise. I would have preferred leaving the disappearance a mystery, but the bit about 'after midnight' was needed to complete the deception. Still unclear about the ex-wives taking the test when he was gone...
Enjoyed the story a lot. Good luck in the contest!
Cool story! I like the idea, and you did a good job with the twist at the end.
I love this kind of thing, but I am kind of a witch, or shall I say a warlock. Happy All Hallows EVE. R.T.
I was really riveted to this story. And it really translates well into film. I could easily see this as a student short film. Awesome!
However, good science fiction and fairy tales do not need to be possible to be rated 5*****.
So I rated it 5*****.
That was just plain fun -
The whole concept and the detail of post midnight - very nice. and very creative.
Thank you yet again - I am working my way down through a bunch of your stuff for the first time and a few revisits heh.
I have to say it was a great story but I have t say something else also.
YOUR FUCKIN' NUTS
HA
I think that that would be a very powerful tool to use. Besides, I don't understand why someone would cheat or worse, grow to hate your spouse even though your the betrayer. In this story it almost sounds like he's getting his wives to cheat on purpose or something.
Poor Alice in wondermausoleum. Lol Hey curses and superstitions are very real for some folks and this story proved it. Thank you DG Hear.
I'l have to use it next month. On Halloween EVE!
Truth About Me! I am shit scared to go into a cemetery full moon, Halloween! One year we went into the cemetery on a full moon on Halloween! Then out of no where it turned stormy ! The wind blew up and then a bolt of lightning struck 20 or30 yards away from us! I tell you I did a little wee! And set a new mile distance record! Look the story is Fantastic! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.
no wonder he has got away with it so often...yet the cheaters always get caught on the day....brilliant little tale to scare a few people...
Negative 5 stars for loving wives!
1 for F & SF.
Halloween or Hallowe'en (a contraction of All Hallows' Evening), also known as All Hallows' Eve, or All Saints' Eve, is the evening before All Hallows' Day, or All Saints' Day.
All Saints' day is 1 November, so Halloween is 31 October (the preceding date).
1. Halloween Eve is redundant (the evening of the evening before All Saints' Day).
2. Halloween Day is by substitution, day of the evening before All Saints' Day, which is still 31 October.
3. After midnight on Halloween (31 October) will be All Saints' Day, which is when the curse is active.
Where is this mausoleum I want to take my x-wife there. hahahahahahaahahhaah
Nobody cares, it wasn't your story. A different kind of tale, DG good job. Signed: BTW
Isn't it amazing in overheard phone calls ,how the lovers talk about what they do and how long they have been doing it?.
.... or one of Dr. Bass's students would nail his ass.
One of the best of the LW Halloween stories. Cheryl needs to be careful.
Well what goes around come around so they say. Her cheating finally caught up with her in the end. Cheaters beware. 5 stars
You could get a novel out of this story. I've heard similar tales about places that were abandoned all of a sudden with no real answer given. Fidelity is not the only test.
If you believe in paranormal...all things can happens !I knew a few of those stories that have been told to me ....]