All Comments on 'Innocence'

Simply outstanding! Thank you!

Wow .... What a story,

Nice one Stephen!

Maybe a bit overdone on the sex parts, but it was part of the story line and it all came together in the last chapter. Nice ending, left me all warm and fuzzy feeling.

great story and very well written

I enjoyed this story thanks, nice details and a good combination of sexual combinations. My personal favorite was the two girls/three guys scene, would love to have seen it!

To all the other wannabeerotic authors: read this story and learn about pace, portion, realism and grammar.

The story was believable because of the way it was written. The language was not overtly crass and smutty, but arousing and enticing. It encouraged and lured the reader to want to keep reading the 13 other pages (quite long in one hit by other Literotica standards).

Stephen, I haven't checked to see if you have written any other stories, but I will and I will keep an eye out for future stories too. In my opinion you have set an extremely high standard. Well done!

I can only endorse what has already been said, beautifully written, grammatically accurate - real quality.

The author's name appears male but the writing is so inside the female head either it's a guy with a partner who edited it or this is shy lady. And profoundly descriptive without gratuitous obscenity in both fantasy thought and actual encounters.

I will definitely be perusing your other offerings!

That would be a great vacation. Fulfill all my sexual fantasies and end the vacation by finding the man of my future. I have a feeling my next vacation is going to be either alot of fun or more than likely a real disappointment. But hey thanks for the great story.

Great storyline, well developed realistic characters, nicely paced. Would have liked one more sex scene at the end just as an au revoir.

I don't normally comment but feel the need after reading this. It took me all weekend to read and my partner thought it was great with all the sex he was getting due to this story. Great story line, really want to go on this holiday myself haha. A few things seemed very repetitive, like people waking up a bit startled and the specific wording that was used, but thats hardly anything major. Really great story that led me to about 10 of my own orgasms over the course of it :)

I have never read a story on here more than 4 pages, yet I was sad to see this story end.

Your writing skills and imagination are second to none.

I could write an essay just on your amazing attention to detail and also on how incredibly arousing the whole story was, but I won't.

If you don't already, then you really should consider writing and publishing.

Your work is truly incredible.

Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Read it all in an evening - start to finish. Loved the playful willingness to let the characters explore. Seemed like the writer was exploring. Thank you for the attention to details - threads, fabric, color, texture, scent. Several typos were irritating - could use a proof reader. Might have explored the "honesty" topic a bit more with the coming clean at the end. Why not tell about Isabella? Was this only a partial transformation? Or just her character's "flaw"? Thought the end might be: "Works for me." Great story.

The best story I've ever read on Literotica or anywhere else. Simply superb.

Loved it, loved it, loved it, every bit of it.

The only thing that comes to mind, is that he should have answered with "Works for me." BUt that's not even a criticism, really. Incredible story, the first of yours I've read, and I plan to read them all, now.

Bravo.

Stephen you have far surpassed anything I have ever read on Literotica or any other website. As I told you before your writing is as good or better than most of the erotic novels I have read that are actually published. And I have read more than my fair share. I loved this story line. I feel like I can actually relate to Kathy. Who doesn't want to enjoy a blow out weekend and then find the man of her dreams. She gets the best of both worlds. And your knowledge of what a woman feels, desires and experiences would rival any womans. If I didn't know better (and I do I think) I'd swear you really are a woman :P

Jucy

This is a fantastic example of a perfectly paced story written by an author who has shown a high degree of care towards his characters through their development within the story.

No simple "wham, bam, thank you ma'am" titillation but a story worthy of the investment of time for any reader.

Congratulations and thanks - long may you continue.

Rich character development, pace so spot on that I didn't notice it til the end of the story, and effortless, seemingly accurate emotional reporting. A very rewarding read. Thank you so much.

One of the best story's here. Well done

Excellent writing, fine example of erotica: simple plot and yet still sexy, with enough depravity to keep the die-hards hooked. Liked the happy ending. Well done.

Love all of it. Although get rid of the sex negativity. No one wishes they had less sex on their death bed. :)

When your protagonist had sex with a developmentally disabled teenager I stopped reading. The socioeconomic disparity was bad enough— the difference in intellectual ability made it rape, pure and simple, without even the pretense of being a rape fantasy.