All Comments on 'Intervention'

i read to the end, so my score was 4. It was very predictable, so for meit became disappointing. Maybe if he took her out and she blew him and he refused to eat her as she was nasty

More! This cries for a follow up !

...the older woman bringing him to maturity. An enjoyable story all the way through, Ann, perhaps the best bit not being the sex but the mercenary Melanie getting her comeuppance. Five star fun.

I'd love to hear more about Shirley....such a fantastic character!

I loved how you used 'Kharma is a Bitch' in this story. You are definitely one of my favorite authors.

I needed a Shirley in my life at 18. I did have a Melanie though. Always love your stories

Great writing and story as always Anne,more please.

I really like it when the good guys win. And you word painted a beautiful character.

I started the story expecting a lesbian theme, and while the sex portion wasn’t my cup of tea, the story drew me in and kept me reading. We all knew a Melanie eh? Nice to see the good guy win! And Shirley is beautiful:).

We’d all have loved to have had a mentor guide us. One small mistake where George refers to Roy as Jim at the start, else, well done indeed. You tell a good story. Ties together well from scene to scene.

Delightful story! Everyone got what they deserved.

5

Lovely story. I am happy it turned out the way it did. Intervention is the perfect name! 5*s

God love the Shirleys of the world. Kind of wish I had a Shirly when I was just starting out. It's hell when you have to learn by trial and error when it could be so much better if you could learn from a teacher with experience and patience. Not saying I didn't have fun learning, but thinking of all the wasting time and effort when it could be so much better with a little knowledge.

Great story, as usual.

Good story and you get extra points for the A-Team pop culture reference. I don't remember the exact years but a good, "Where's the Beef" and "Help I've fallen and I can't get up" reference would have played well also lol.

The kind of awakening from which most young men could benefit. You have finely tuned the plot with believable dialog. What's not to love?

I wish I had a female mentor like that!! A story- a lesson - great sex, and a young man grows up!! Great!

Watching her exit, Shirley also couldn't help but smile. Like the star of one of her favorite television shows, she loved it when a plan came together...

And the diners gave a round of applause.

5* given

Phenominal, this was the first of your stories I have read. I don't know if there was something almost wholesome about it, but while a bit predictable it didn't go exactly the way I expected. I liked how Melanie got her comeuppance at the end. Offered a bit of closure to the whole thing. I for one greatly appreciate it.

Great storyline... I remember lusting after a few of the women around me when I was younger. The whole story line was very well done and enjoyable

I really wish I had such a fortuitous education, had to settle for back seat of a Nash Rambler. You certainly have a way with words, I have enjoyed all of your stories.

I enjoyed the character development & your concise writing style. Thanks Rob

Very entertaining storylines and so well written. Thanks for sharing.

Nicely done, Anne

Young men like Dean need instruction from experienced older ladies. Some nice young lady(ies) will eventually gain the benefit of the things he has been taught. But not Melanie. All that Melanie has now is an oaf like Cody,

Lue

Thank you. I thought it was interesting and it held my attention, even though it's quite long by the standards of these stories. What I like about it most is that the characters aren't stereotypes - e.g. it's shy Dean who initiates fucking with experienced Shirley and not the other way around.

When I first saw the name D"'Angelo's", I thought the name was in reference to your more older work "Delayed Gratification", but I read that story and realized that the particular diner's name was Tony's. It's a very good story that actually has similarities to Delayed Gratification, a good story as well.

It makes me happy when I see one of your stories posted. They are always a nice slice of life with an interesting story that is erotic rather than porn. Please keep them coming. Thank you.

Ann, as always, your stories are wonderful. And this coming of age story is another wonderfully written story. Thank you so much for sharing this with us!

Exactly what anonymous said - thank you!

A great story as always. Enjoyed the way you developed the storyline and carried us to the perfect finish.

Thanks for another great story. I look forward to seeing your posts, and wish you’d write more. You’re the best!

BTW, there’s a typo near the bottom of page three where the word “potion” is used instead of “position”.

I enjoy reading your stories because you have a very good gift at expressing feelings/thoughts in your words. You have a great ability to make a reader eager to see what come next as well as stirring thoughts along with feelings as one reads your stories. Please keep writing and sharing such a great gift that you have in making things come to life :)

you always have characters that we can all at least partly recognize, either in ourselves or people we know...and this is no exception...we have all known Melanies in our day...nice to see her get what she deserves!

And definitely an enjoyable one and not going to be the last either. Maybe a tad predictable but I thought the writing was good and the final dialogue between Dean and Melanie was excellent.

Personally, I like a little longer stories since the characters can be fleshed out more thoroughly and various incidents can be brought in.

The affair with Shirley was a single occurrence with no hint as to whether it's a one-off or more to come. He definitely would need more experience so is Shirley destined for a comeback until he moves away to college. Yes please. 5 from me.

As soon as I saw a new story from you Ann I knew I was going to enjoy a well written tale. I was right. You always portray easily believable characters and your story lines unfold well. Never rushed or choppy. And the intimate scenes are intensely erotic more than simply pornographic. Nicely done!

Once more I just want to thank all those kind enough to leave a comment about the story - both on here and directly via email. They were all greatly appreciated.

Madame Douglas wonderful story telling as usual.

Merci

Englishman in Paris

Such a fabulous story that took me back forty years to when I lost my virginity to an older woman. Having someone so willing to pass on their experiences is a priceless gift that many fail to see or appreciate !!!!

Great older/younger story. I liked the realism in his inexperience and how she guides him to the pleasures.

Every man has a "first time" but this story, artfully told from a woman's perspective, shows what most men miss by not paying close enough attention to a woman's power of communication. Ms Douglas' superior talent as a writer had me wishing that "Shirley" had been my first, and my first was pretty good. Ann Douglas is a gift to the world.

Fantastic - I have just found you Ann and I am loving discovering your characters. This was he best! Well told and couldn't help but smile at the end.

I always enjoy an Ann Douglas story. Well done, 5 stars.