All Comments on 'Invisible In Plain Sight'

Another great story!

5

Great story. Thank you very much.

That was beautiful, thank you! 5*

Just an awesome story. Worth every bit of 5 stars!

An enjoyable little romance. Loved it. Thanks.

Beautiful story. Loved the describe language. First time reading this author will definitely read more.

First time reading this author. Very beautiful love story. Very descriptive with good character development.

A very sweet story that's good for a soul in these trying times. THANK YOU!!!!!

So special, so warm, so romantic. I truly feel good story.

…and Amy sought professional counseling to deal ,with her irrational behavior.

Good story.

I really enjoyed this, especially the rash excitement of new love and some pitfalls of office relationships. Not a criticism, so please don’t take this that way, but while reading I didn’t feel the MCs were invisible in their personal and professional lives, though I understand from their perspective they did feel they were often under the radar, so to speak. 5 stars.

Well done with a complicated yet solid ending - 5*

Really sweet story, with a lot of emotional depth and just enough doubt to keep one hoping for rather than knowing the end result. Nicely told and a new personal favorite. 5*

I enjoyed reading your story. I like your detailed actual settings. It’s fun for this Yankee to “see” another part of the world. Your characters are well-developed and interesting. I’m glad you worked some conflict in there, even if Amy’s reaction seemed a bit extreme. I think the story needed that. 5* and I’m going to have to find your other stories now!

Thank you for writing and thank you for sharing your work.

I really liked it 5 stars.

“My world was in my arms.” Now that’s good stuff right there. Thanks for sharing.

Well written and a great read. 5⛤

This was rather drawn out for what was here. Sure, it's a feel good story but one can skip ahead a lot and not miss anything. This ought to have been reduced by half

brilliant story with the right amount of suspense and drama. Keep up the good work.

Loved the story. It was a tad too long, but well enough written to make it endurable. Two nit picks: literally means just that, it means that it actually happened; I think that word that writer wants is “figuratively.” The other nit pick is the use of “both”; it seems that writers from England and its colonies use both when it is clearly implied and unnecessary. Thanks for not using “myself,” a word that is often misused to the point of distraction.

Very, very good! 👍 How-some-ever... [Southern United States colloquialism]

There were numerous places where you really could have used a talented editor to catch mistakes. For example, in the following quotation you used the same phrases back to back in the same paragraph. There were only two sentences separating them, so this was a freshman writing faux pas:

☆☆☆"She seemed to be integrating into the Projects team relatively smoothly. She lunched with them most days and they all appeared to be getting along. She was definitely the youngest member of the Projects team. I lunched at the same time as them and I could see them all getting along."☆☆☆

Do you see it? Redundant.

But in spite of the errors such as this, I really enjoyed your heartwarming story very much. I voted 5/5!

I saw a couple comments stating this story were too long.

While it certainly could be shorter and not every story needs to be drawn out, I felt it fit rather nicely for this one.

It forces the reader to spend the time getting into the relationship. And thus makes it feel less rushed.

5 stars loved it, good length and will read it again.