All Comments on 'Iona Online Ch. 09'

Things finally seem to be going somewhere. The main thing that's bugging me is the typos. For the most part I can mostly ignore them but this second page had far more in a short span than the other chapters. You should really think about looking for an editor.

Really loving this story and looking forward to future installments

I enjoy the isekai (sent to another fantasy world) genre and its tropes, but they often feel like the MC is overpowered. doubly so for erotica. Both are designed for whimsical wish-fulfillment. In this series you really feel the growth and struggle within an intriguing fantasy world. It allows for very promising storytelling.

Please keep writing!

I'm really enjoying this story, although (as I make a habit of saying on this site) you need an editor to catch your errors. Other than that, the only issue I have is the chapters aren't long enough! I would suggest at least joining a few (2-3) chapters together in the future so that there is enough story for the reader to get their teeth into. It's not an erotic scenario story but seems like a full blown arcing story so give the readers something to judge rather than drip feeding them a page at a time.

I look forward to reading more.