All Comments on 'Is it a Trick or a Treat?'

Nope!! 1*

Sorry Dan, your punctuation is a mess. I couldn't handle it; had to bail out. Sorry I couldn't finish the story. Maybe you should run it through a grammar checking program next time.

Who is Mike and what happened to him?

Really hot premise and story! Punctuation and syntax, (and some inadvertent pronouns inversions) make it a bit confusing and hard to read sometimes, though. But still, very exciting read.

Great story, but could use some editing.

Appreciate the feedback all, sorry to hear about the punctuation and grammar issues. I think the suggestion of an editor is a good one and I'll look into it for next time.

Glad to hear the premise of the story was good for some.

This is a dream scenario! Very immersive writing too

who's mike?