All Comments on 'Isabelle & Simon Ch. 02'
by PrinceLuke
- 14 Comments
vernon71almost 3 years agoSimon seems too nice -if my sister was such a bitch to me I wouldn't even try to talk to her or be around her
PrinceLukealmost 3 years agoAuthorGlad to hear it! Chapter 3 is uploaded already just waiting for it to be approved.
PrinceLukealmost 3 years agoAuthorSimon still remembers the 18 years of them being close and friends with one another, he misses how they were and as horrible as Isabelle may be to him he can't help but hope that her attitude to him will improve one day.
Wargameralmost 3 years agoSorry for the late comment, just read the story now after seeing there was a chapter 3.
Don’t know how I missed Ch 2, but l did!!
No harm done caught up to it now.
More character development and build up. Looking forward to where this heads. So having said that on to Ch 3
Thank you, by the way, for the kind comments.
Just remember what I always point out to erring writers…. Incest does not share, for the most obvious of reasons.
Thx for the past chapters, l hope you do get to 30 chapters.
Good luck and keep them coming.
PrinceLukealmost 3 years agoAuthorYou know me lol, Incest does not share! It's true love all the way. There is no need to worry about that ever going awry in my stories xD. Glad you enjoyed the chapter, and thanks for the five stars.
ScottishTexanabout 1 year agoI know that some time during the past two years that I have already read this, but I don't remember any of it. 😕 That usually indicates that I was very fatigued at the moment that I was reading it. But I have a vote already recorded so I've definitely been here before. Stranger still is the fact that I didn't comment, but the author has the authority to delete anyone's comment if he or she sees fit. I'm obviously enjoying the story up to this point since I'm giving you a four. I'm fairly certain that I probably took one point off due to the single page installment. So there should have been a mostly positive response from me already posted. Oh well, moving forward...
Quoting:
Isabelle had come downstairs dressed in her exercise outfit, a red sports bra, black tights, and neon pink running shoes. She had an amazing figure...[snip]
[Continues]...She had to stretch to reach the cupboard, not being as tall as I am, which afforded me a lovely side profile of her curvy ass and tits. I tried not to look, I really did, but my eyes were drawn back to her amazing body. Her C-cup tits are amazing, with no sag. They are award-worthy masterpieces of perkiness! [End Quote]
OKAY, so you're describing her apparel and dress her in a sports bra followed by the comment that her tits don't sag. OF COURSE THEY DON'T BECAUSE THEY ARE IN A BRA!!!! Because it's a sports bra, they'll be mashed by the elastic holding them tightly in place so that they cannot bounce or jiggle during exercise. DOH!
Then there's the typo when you forgot to put quotation marks on one of your sentences:
[Begin] So you're stupid as well as a pervert, staring at my tits counts as ogling me idiot. She turns her piercing hazel eyes on me and glares at me while she continues to make her drink. [End] The first sentence was obviously dialog and the second sentence was action.
But I didn't take points off for the typo because accidents happen. 4/5
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