by 008dick
Great story.All readers here are sick and perverted and thats why we come here.
Not me a lot of you will say but we all know we are sick and perverted here.
Why else come here,Its not a church??
as the cabbies tip and never seen her again... Oh, excuse me I forgot how screwed up you are.
You to dens too no how two rite gud story. Join thee fundamentalist pron movement or bun in hell you heethen!!1!
Just another night full of sissy boy wimp cuck garbage, gave more 1**** scores than I gave all last month. Pathetic....
I say you didn’t do a bad job with the writing part of the story. As far as the story plot goes, you picked one that was sure to draw fire, but it’s your story so stick with it.
If you are interested in constructive comments, I’ll offer this, which I just ran across the other day while trying to improve my own writing. @ Make your characters sound like real people. Somehow I have a problem thinking a woman in her situation would say, “Fuck me please…..cum inside me, fill this wanton whore with your hot cum.” To me that’s the kind of crap we use attempting to excite the wackers. Does something like, “C’mon, baby. I wanta feel you cum in me,” sound better? Very few folks speak good English in everyday talking and I’ll bet none do it in the heat of passion.
Keep writing. I gave you a 3.
Oh, that is so special!!! Just can't believe you are wasting such literary genius. How will you top this?
008 licence to write a bad story...1st - It's bad when a writer changes category from chapter to chapter! 2nd - It's even worst when the writer choses not believable characters, that change night to day in seconds. So this story has no positive point...1*
Most men want their wives to be sluts in ladies' clothing. I am one and proud of it. A good, hard fuck from a strange cock, coupled with exhibitionism and a husband who enjoys the scene make for wonderful sex. Ignore the usual gaggle of losers who angrily cope with their loneliness and impotence.
Pity you haven't submitted further chapters - enjoyed 1 and 2
When I was young I had Sex with the boys and Mens in the back seat of there car. Now I'm older and the Man I'm with now likes to show me off and let strangers see me down sucking his cock and some times when he has me outside one his vehicles and hes fucking me. He even rolled my side window down to let some touch me while I was kneeling on the passenger seat sucking his dick while he was in the Driver seat. :-)
I like when he shows me off as he calls it and other Lovers did. I guess it come alot from my past and when I Danced for a Living. :-)
He started something that he'll not be able to control. A Wanton woman knows no bounds, she'll need more big black cock. Did she get Astons number? Continue please.