by Scott_Free
Really nice story with good pacing and interesting characterizations.
However. When Jazz wakes Derrick "She languished in my gaze, and turned around to let me see her beautiful ass."
Synonyms for languished: sank, wasted (away), weakened, wilted, withered
Synonyms for luxuriated: reveled, basked, relished, savored, lapped up, got a charge/thrill/kick from, indulged (herself) in, wallowed in, enjoyed, took pleasure in, appreciated 👍
I for one appreciate you leaving a little room for imagination. But if you really must write a sequel guess I'll have to read it. Thanks
...seems to be quite rampant on this site. There are 10 unfinished gems to every one that is.
You made me care about the characters... even the lead guitarist, brother. I can't wait for more of this story. I definately don't want Jazz to be hurt though!
The set-up seemed like more than imagination. Please keep writing this story!
It's damned unfair but a story like this obviously has some basis in experience. No one could invent that from scratch.
Fabulous, 5*
Great story! You pay attention to both players and manage to keep the story flowing. 5 stars and waiting for chapter 2.