All Comments on 'It's Hard To Find A Good Plumber'

You do have talent. You have great dialog and an actual story.

A good editor would help, but mostly all you need is practice.

Keep writing. All you'll get is better.

Really liked your story. Characters come across as real people. Keep on doing what you are doing.

Huh...what is going on? Who is who? Who did what? Where are we? There might be a story in there, but I couldn't find it.

JB44, Thanks for sharing! No disclaimer on the end needed for this old fart. An enjoyable read for a Sunday morning. Plot, characters and dialogue were most entertaining.

Ed

Ok...so I had to pay attention to know who was speaking to whom (that syntax was for the complainer who needs an editor for his comments). Good story, good flow, and no need to dumb it down! :)

But I would have had a DNA test done.

another pussy dude runs off for a long time, then takes the cunt back blah blah blah... grow a pair of nuts for the useless sack

Only quibble is that Sweetie sidestepped Hubby's attempt to get her to account for the allegations regarding her post-eruption activities! Virgil's claim that he might have 'overstated ' helped a little. However, Virgil was not the only one making those claims!

Delightfully executed!

5*

of course there was a baby and of course it just HAD to be his..

after all... its not possible that a women that would believe a story like without even giving her husband to be 1 second to defend himself could not possibly fuck other men.....

Thanks for sharing your story with us. The run-away-while-your-baby-is-born plot has been pretty well worked over here in Loving Wives, but there's only about 19 different plots available so it's pretty hard to blaze a new trail. For me, the primary problem in your story is the lack of any type of confrontation or resolution with good buddy Virgil. The resolution with Sydnee was weak (she never really addressed questions about her activities after the split) but at least it was there. Again thanks for sharing, I look forward to your next story.

Thanks for the offering. It was your dialogue that came across as confusing.

The fidelity hoax is a common activity in the USA. I read more than 20 stories in this genre.

WWWelllll, Out of your 7 yeses 5 of them are nos.

You figure it out.

Very nice story.

You don't need nothing more...Great story...Great reading...4*

I thought it was a very good story. Keep up the good work.

Mainly because I liked Ken. That's important for me. Why would I want to read about people I wouldn't want to hang out with? I don't think I am alone in this as my favorite stories are all highly rated. Keep up the good work.

I hope you write more.

Since others have mentioned it too I'd like to say that the major problem for me was that the author allowed me to suspect that Kennedy wasn't his. Why?

Some of the best dialog I've read in years, and a grand story to tell with it. Stretching for a suggestion, them fitting in so well and so deep was a bit trite, but sweet gets better scores.

Chilley

and a fun story.

cheers

I guess people really do talk and act like this. It's just that I can't bear to read it. Of course, you can't please everyone.

living in kentucky i know a lot of stupid rednecks. not even any of my dumbass cousins are this fucking stupid.

Very entertaining...thanks.

Sounds like my former in-laws, but less intelligent.

I always appreciate a new story of yours. Of course it jumps around but so does life and it's fun to complete the scenes in one's mind. Thank you for writing this story.

Entertaining story. As for your disclaimers? Maybe use spellcheck? And I don't ever recall it being cold in LA.

Really nice story. The only question I have is whether Kennedy is Ken's daughter - Sydnee was messing around with Virgil and apparently others.

@ LVGirl Fidelity hoax was organized by his "true?!" friend to Sydnee and Ken!

My question is, if you knew all of the things that were wrong with it, why not change them before submitting?

It was an enjoyable premise and a decent story. Would have been superb if cleaned up a little. I just recently got someone to agree to be my editor, so all of my stories thus far have been without one. Believe me, I know all about submitting a story that isn't 100%.

Will read more from this author.

They don't all end bad. This one made me smile. Thanks again

and I liked this story.

This was a good read overall. I enjoyed Ken's travails and far flung travels. I hope Kennedy isn't as prone to gullibility as her mother. The smarter elementary school students she teaches probably have little trouble getting over with variations of dog ate my homework excuses.

Keep everything as it is and write more. It will give us English nerds something to chew on while secretly smiling and having sparkly days *still chuckling

Read your stuff backwards, it makes all the things others are yapping about shut down.

As for me, I am good with the story

I hates dumbchits who complain but never offer any help, always log in a-naughty-moose. Ifn ya aint gonna back up your remarks by at least identifying yo self then youz remarks aint worth de bits to put it up and take up space.

Jumped a bit much for me, but that is just me. I am not the writer so in this only his opinion counts. Parents almost seem to be a non-entity. His mother was pissed that the baby was not named after her? Naming your child after your parents I'd the highest form of respect you can give them. That having been said, this being fiction and all, someone should have told his mother to put a sock in it. Our neighbors in or old apartment building had something similar going on. They realized that part of the problem were the in-laws that were putting a strain on the marriage. So he manned up, called his parents and read them the riot act, stop with the bullshit! If you fail to cease and desist from the active disparaging of me or my wife, you will not see the grand kids anymore. She didn't believe him, so they stopped visiting. Took her a week to catch on, but she did. She actually went to therapy for a while, and became a decent human being.

As for this story, Robin really needed a reality check. She shit on him all his life it seems, and then wonders why he left and why he didn't name any of his kids after her? Oh well

Thank you for the offering...

Women are spiteful and she was furious so she WOULD have fucked somebody to 'get even' with Ken for doing what his best friend Virgil had 'helpfully' told her he was doing.

In this unfinished story... why didn't Ken corner Virgil, get his $1,000 back and then take vengeance for his betrayal?

Gave it 3 *'s (incomplete story) Virgil hasn't repaid the bail or faced the fury of overdue justice.

I don't like crackers and peckerwoods, I don't like Republicans, I hate Southern politics, but I like JimBob44 and I like this story.

As things jumped just pause and reread. Works for me.

Thanks for sharing.

Interesting characters. Peppy narrative.

I like your world. Stop with the disclaimers and just write.

it's not really that hard to believe that she fell for dickweed's story... After all, he's his "best friend"... And he had pictures to back up that her gf appeared TO be his type...

But even if she felt she couldn't trust Ken, you'd have figured she'd at LEAST have asked HER friend...

Liked both the way it ran and the way it played out....

I especially liked his "suggestion" to his mother that she drop dead...

they act live the wind in trees and leafe" TK U MLJ LV NV

Seems the author was confused, she started out being called Sidney, and then her name turns into Sydnee, which seems like a weird misspelling.

Seems like Ken should have asked for a paternity test. After all he did hear about her running around, considering that there was that mention about teaching Ken about what it felt like, it seems there was some truth to what Ken heard.

Sidney might have said that he's the only man she's loved, but that doesn't mean he's only man she's fucked.

He really should have been a lot more reticent, instead of just allowing her back into his life because of a daughter that may or may not be his.

The whole reconciliation was way too short and rushed.

and tough shit if there's one I may not. I also have no problem with you skipping around. I makes the stories interesting, and if it confuses people, maybe they shouldn't be reading adult stories.

story was really good.

but i think most of the comments are hilarious.

So Harry didn't like it

and the Dawg sniffed once and left

Ib_ wrote down a lot of words

though I understand not what he said

I'll admit to slight confusion as I translated your patois

but in the end I had to smile

"t'wern't nothin' stuck in my craw"

I read all the comments - it appears the commenters maybe didn't read the story???

(1) The name mix up was all on Virgil!!! (2) You have a loving yet insecure woman (i.e., "not his type") that ends up in a relationship she never dreamed of having and then Virgil fucks it up. Suddenly she is supposed to be all poised, take charge, in control, etc. and confront with his "infidelity" her dream guy she never thought she could get. WTF??? (3) Virgil set up all the comments about her going out with others,

JB, I like your stories cause they just seem "real".

He should have gotten a paternity rather than believing her.

Not to mention, what happened to Ingrid going after him? Would have been better than a cheating and stupidly gullible ex.

Also, Virgil needs some punishment.

I liked it. Enjoyable reading time. Ok I can agree a little trouble since not marked when skipping around characters and places. Easy to pick out after and really did not detract from the story. Sorry I missed this one, I just now caught it but glad since a real lack of good stories right now it was appreciated even more.

Please keep writing and I will keep reading.

Read it for third time, should be a 5*

i very much like these kind of things.

and damn close to illiterate.

There are very few authors that create such realistic characters, and can write in authentic dialect. I love your stuff, and eagerly await each new gem.

JimBob, you are one of Literotica’s shining stars!

Rutty

Damn you can write!

...where you let your 'best man' understand the true depths of your disappointment in his behavior. Can't imagine a reconciliation without it.

But I have to say, after a while all that coonass language gets tiresome. I know a lot of people down in Louisiana who talk that way when they could be speaking the Queen’s English if they wanted to. But then, they live in Louisiana, so who knows?

"Coonass language." it helps the reader to get a feel of the characters and settings and gives me insights into what seems to be a uniquely curious blend of cultures, for instance a year ago I didn't know what a grit was, or how or where to hunt them. I also find it refreshing to read a story where the author's first priority is not to be to satisfy the grammar and spell check of their word processor, carry on.

Jimbob, I love your comments on the comments.

Made me smile and angry at the same time. Hated how he was done in by his “best friend” and glad it worked out in the end.

Jb...dont let dumbasses get to you. Youre an excellent writer and ive thoroughly enjoyed all your stories.

The only problems I had with it were I don't think they speak Cajun all over the country and I can't believe he just accepted the fact that it was his baby without getting a DNA test. Also, in all the places he went to, why didn't he ever settle down? Yeah - I know - Papa was a rolling stone, but damn!

2 stars

And I really enjoy the cut & thrust & rhythm of your dialog. Second time read for me and just as good as the first time.

I dont take back cheating whores, and by her own admission she fucked Virgil

Also what the fuck is this guys obsession with fat unattractive people fucking

Want to write about uggos getting it on put it in the fetish category

5 Stars!

Although this reads like the story of my life. Asshole relatives and two-faced backstabbing “friends”. Pretty good story, though. I do believe I would have stuck with the houseboat. I always thought I’d like to live on one.

I always enjoy your stories and your characters. This was.great.

There is no Waffle House in California. I was into it, but that ruined the “theater of the mind” for me.

Also, to the Anonymous user that bitched about the writer’s penchant for uggos, fuck you in your goat ass. Chunky women aren’t uggos. Some of the hottest women I have known had a few pounds on them; whereas I have met waaaay too many skinny chicks that were true bitches and felt their looks excused their piss-poor behavior.

average HEALTHY weight of a person five foot tall is 100lbs + 5lb per inch

So 160 lbs is a good weight for someone six feet tall

the height/weight BMI index puts a 4'11" person at 160 lbs at 33% which is MEDICALLY OBESE

Fun characters. Nice, light-weight story. Thanks.

Another gem in the literary jewelry store that is Literotica !

100 lbs + 5 lbs an inch would make a 6’ (72”) person weigh 460 lbs or am I missing something?

Is the kid really his?

Great start, lame end. jmoyomvs.

“Good Plumber” is on my short list of feel good stories when I need a quick happy ever after (as well as “10:00, Late”). Can’t even guess how many times this makes that I’ve read “Good Plumber “. Thanks again.

Story needs a little payback on his buddy Virgil. Bad enough if any enemy did that but a friend doing it is awful.

Or rather, the lack of it. I can't imagine taking up with Sydney without having the results of the DNA test in my hand. Ostensibly she was doing "revenge" fucks while they were apart. I'd find it difficult to trust her at all.

And Virgil? Just put in an anonymous tip to the bank examiners that they should take a good look at his role in the bank. After all, he is a proven liar so it wouldn't be too much of a stretch of credulity to assume his other dealings followed suit.

And yeah, ND is damned cold at times.

J

The story is a little bit shaky. I suggest you stick to the omniscient point of view. Shifting POV prevents readers from immersing themselves to the story. Also, 3rd person POV allows you to combine the inner thoughts of different characters.

I assume sydnee is already pregnant when she decides to stray. The story is good with happy ending

With any one of a thousand stories on here. Cut and paste writing, done by pretty much every writer.

Jealous friend tells wife/girlfriend/fiancée guy is cheating. She believes it without asking a single question..... Check

She goes nuts.... Check

His mother sides with her, instead of her own son.... Check

Guy runs away crying.... Check

She suddenly decides he's innocent and wants him back.... Check

He's pissed off at everyone.... Check

She's suddenly pregnant/has child aged X years old.... Check

Claims it's his, with zero evidence offered or asked for.... Check

All is forgiven, happy ever after....... Check

Check please!

Really enjoyed this one - not as dark as some of yours and the husband and wife aren't 20+ years apart in age. 5*

Really ,really enjoy the dialogue. It's so natural! The whole story is enhanced by the banter/repartee and the interaction between the various characters. All the scenes are very realistic, which makes the plot flow easily. Sad to see JimBob44 is no longer writing.5*s.

Could you explain to me how you see Ken. Please

Whatever happened to Virgil? Heard nothing after he ran out of the bank.

So , we never find out who the kids real father is ?

Ken is an idiot for not having a test done and even more so for taking this slut back

Not bad, gave it a 4, quite a light and enjoyable story even if there was a few problems. Virgil his best friend betraying him was never explained and Sydnee being taken back even with a kid (that he had no idea was his) so easily after literally running across the country was odd. Otherwise a good story.

Nice

With a friend like our hero had, who needs enemies. He ran across the country thinking he was accused of something, but he didn't do anything. Nice happily ever after.

Five Stars

This is a great story well told. I kept laughing aloud reading it.

After all that, I really have no idea why he's back with Sydnee.

Oh no, it's the "surprise child" cliche again. Oh well.

Sorry, but I must disagree with you.

You do not need an editor.

It is in the right category.

It does not jump around too much.

There are not too many people to keep track of.

It is not too long.

It is not stupid shit.

And you do not suck.

This is a very engaging and interesting story that rings true on every page. I liked it a lot and I especially liked the character development! 5***** from me.

Some unresolved things in the story. Ok otherwise.

Sydnee “got down and dirty with some of his boys” and he just accepts the baby is his?

Glad he had balls for most of the story...

Yes this story was kick ass!

Yes this story was fun to read!

Yes this story was well written!

Yes this story was adventurous!

Yes this story was a favorite!

Yes this story was worth 5 stars!

Uh yeah, thus one sucks

Another great addition to your family of characters.

You always leave us wanting more from them, even as you finish your story.

That I think is your best trait.

I certainly enjoy all of JimBob44's stories but this was a little disappointing with the "surprise child" trope that is overused on this site and can't be done in anything resembling a believable way.

Why do these "writers" think that composing nearly 1 and a half pages of travel/destination spots drivel is actually interesting writing?

I am convinced people here think they are hot shit when they manage a rating above 4. I have often observed the bemoaning of people who comment but haven't posted, as if that is evidence of anything but time on one's hands.

If a reader can skip multiple pages and miss nothing, the story is shit. It's more than that, it's a waste of god damned time. Time that one can never get back.

So with all due respect to this 4.5 score... I once worked with a mentally retarded person at a supermarket. I was in high-school at the time. The bag boy was nearly 40 and believed wrestling to be real. He talked about it nonstop.

Now, I am not insulting the man. He was sweet, kind and innocent. He couldn't help what he was. He did believe something was real when it wasn't. Just like the readers are too retarded to understand bad fiction.

This was pure shit and a complete waste of time. ss77

This is just bad

Cant plz everyone i guess. Maybe THEY should try writeing THEIR own stories, and let Us tare THEIR stories apart.. i hope u DONT listen to all the bs. U know they have their heads up a certain part of their body

All i can say is THANKYOU FOR UR STORIES... HOPE U KEEP WRITEING THEM..

REALLY, AFTER ALL THE DRAMA THE STUPID KEN ENDS UP WITH THE WHINING SLUT BITCH SYDNEE.....TRASH