by mellors14
Very well done. Focused on two characters and using the Covid quarantine to slowly build an attraction that would likely never have happened otherwise. The best part about it, is it could really happen, not a fantasy, it could be a true story.
LOVED this story , erotic and romantic . the slow build was especially nice! the way you allowed them to fit together in all ways was awesome! 5stars.
Great pacing and great use of present topical events to elevate the narrative!
I honestly don't think she deserved him. She is shallow and self-centered, and kind of mean in thought, even if not much in deed past that first day or two. The first four and a half pages of the story she was quite mean to him in her thoughts, constantly belittling him in some way or another. Like him being nothing to write home about, or that he was merely okay, not great, just okay, etc. The last page and a half kind of made up for it, she was incredibly sweet and thoughtful, but I don't think that makes up for the majority of the story even though I am happy that he finally found happiness.
Your last commentator was in my opinion way off the beam I thought the story moved all g well as the couple gradually got to know each other better as the story developed. I enjoyed it and felt there's a couple in the making. 5 stars.
I strongly disagree with InfiniteXaos's comment:
"honestly don't think she deserved him. She is shallow and self-centered, and kind of mean in thought, even if not much in deed past that first day or two"
I think she is reacting to her unexpected situation. --
So, Anika was expecting to head home to see her boyfriend and family neither of whom she had seen in a while. As she spends time with Adam, she begins to have feelings for him and see the flaws in her relationship with her boyfriend. She is confused and trying to figure things out. --
I have never had a boyfriend, but if I found myself in a similar situation I believe I would have a similar thoughts. It would be confusing to find myself having feelings for a woman I don't know well but is suddenly my roommate, while simultaneously realizing that the situation is pointing out the flaws in my relationship with my girlfriend, --
Having been in love before and sharing my life with a very beautiful woman now, I am aware that beauty is much more than physical features. I fell deeply in love with a woman who ended up dying from a brain tumor. When I met the woman who is now my life partner, I too had concerns. I felt that all I could see was that she was not my lost love. As we grew close though, there came a point where we fell deeply in love. When that happened, she was every bit as amazing and beautiful as my lost love. --
Someone's "physical features" are the first thing that one notices about someone, but beauty is the appreciation of a lover in their entirety. I can understand Anika's thoughts as she begins to realize that she is falling in love with her unexpected roommate. Finding one's self drawn to another, a stranger in many ways, can be somewhat frightening; perhaps a fear of "the unknown". A lover, past or current, is a warm and safe known in comparison. --
I found this a well-written account of a woman realizing that she is falling in love.
You allowed the story to develop and did not rush anything! Thanks for a well written story with characters the reader was allowed to get to know.