All Comments on 'It's The Way You Look At Me Ch. 04'
by betweenthesheets
- 10 Comments
Anonymousabout 9 years agoExcellent writing and winding of characters through erotic storytelling. Very good! Keep it a coming!
BRAVO!!
redlion75about 9 years agowaiting for the shoe to drop.who finds out and how,do they give them shit or accept them?
Anonymousabout 9 years agoFantastic as usual. I hope they get their happily ever after with each other
Anonymousabout 9 years agoThoroughly enjoyed the story telling, made we come back looking for the next chapter(s). Thanks for your efforts !!
BurntRedstoneabout 9 years agoReally sweet story here. Enjoying it very much! Thanks for sharing.
Rapier875over 8 years ago...how many blokes wished they'd had a cousin like Jaime when they were growing up ? I know I do !
You have a real knack for being able to create great characters and write very descriptive prose, especially with the sex scenes.
This is an awesome story - which I am really enjoying reading.
Turtle1952about 8 years agoI have a cousin just like Jamie that I have lusted for since we were 16 years old. Maybe one day before I die I will get to spend some time with her just like Owen is with Jamie. Thank you for your story, I have enjoyed it tremendously.
Anonymousover 4 years ago"It's time to reorganize again," Jordan sighed."
"She sighed and turned over to face Jordan. I could hear them giggling as they talked quietly. Jamie came out of the bathroom. She seemed to float across the floor towards the bed. She playfully jumped in before bouncing and laying over me."
"Thank you," she whispered. "I needed that. I was wet." Her hot breath hit my ear as she said wet. It sent a chill down my spine and made my cock stir again."
What does that scene mean? What happened in the bathroom?
shyspudover 4 years agothis is beyond wonderful.....so well written and you captured the moment beautifully.
I am so hoping tat its more developed between these two, Owen and Jamie but hopefully with him {or her} fucking someone else...
its so perfect, beyond 5 stars
Anonymousover 3 years agoIt seems one of the weaknesses of MSW is its non-treatment of commas. I'm on Chapter four, and so far you're missing about 200 commas or probably even more. Thus " I hear you, Jamie." becomes "I hear you Jamie.", which is incorrect English grammar,
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