by RedHeadedSlutRaina
Just like the first story, very entertaining, but rather quick aka short with a hurried ending. It doesn't need to be long and drawn out but just like sex dont rush it, and no slam bam thank you maam. Keep up the good work.
but a little rushed. The almost-foreplay was very exciting, and I can understand if you rushed it to illustrate how hard and fast the encounter was, but it was far too short even by quickie-standards.
you are developing the charachter of jackie excellently sexy action is even sexier when the charachter of at least one of the parties is believeable and desireable