All Comments on 'Jack the Complex Lover Ch. 01'

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Sorry, but this was basically unreadable. The sentences are more like bullet points, and all that is missing are the bullets.

Stories should flow. Not be limited. Be creative. Not like this. This is how children write.

you write at a 3rd grade level. figure it out for fuck's sake.

Excellent story line, but just a minor slip - confusion of drifting from Joan to jill. Still all in all , brong on chaoter 2