All Comments on 'Jacki and Lucy Two Sisters at War'

One of the best stories I have read in any category. The raw emotion was powerful. Five stars.

Cagivaurl you are a brilliant writer and I enjoyed this story and hope you write more about these two young ladies please so we know how they enjoy the life together fantastic write more soon Cagivagurl . xxx

Very, very sweet story ;-)

Couldn’t agree more with comment #1. A 5 star masterpiece, so many ups and downs and a happy ending. Thank you for this work.

I loved reading this so much even though it did make me cry in places. And I do love a happy ending!

But Lucy will still be jealous. D

Excellent writing and impressive vocabulary. I'm not sure if it was what you were aiming for, but I couldn't help thinking that Lucy was so clingy that it was no wonder Leeza (who morphed into Gail in a couple of places) left her. Aside from that there were a couple of little things that didn't quite gel for me, but none of this was enough to spoil a very fine story.

Sweet story that I enjoyed greatly.....

Great story with nice development. I liked the twists and turns and you handled that beautifully.

The last paragraph makes me want to forget the current project I am trying to finish and take my Multistrada out for a ride. I think the "Dad" would enjoy a new Thruxton RS. Take some money from selling the house and business to give him a new toy.

Loved it. Was rivetted to it. Thank you for the excellent read.

This was a dope-ass story, Cagivagurl. Like some of the others, it made me cry, but good tears. When she called Mrs. B "Mum," for the first time, wow, that hit me. Great job and thank you for writing this terrific story. Randi.

Really loved the build up to what she needed right there in front of her.

I love this author. She is so prolific that I don't know how she finds time for day to day life. Her stories run the full range of topics. Some topics, like this story, are not what I read Literotica for, but the writing is so good, and stories so enthralling that I become immersed in the story. A fun story.

A brilliant piece of writing. Great characters. Story had flow and pace.

Hooked

More twists and turns than your average Kiwi Highway (think Wellington to Martinborough) You knew where it was headed but what a ride to get there. So nice, so well done, your work is appreciated. Thank you for these wonderful women.

Lovely. The story is warm and the characters heartfelt. Tears and smiles.

A thoroughly enjoyable read and worthy of the 5 stars. Though if it was real life I think Lucy would need to stop being so needy and clinging if their relationship were to have any chance of lasting.

Wonderfully real, 3-dimensional characters embedded within a heartfelt romance; twist, turns and moments of self reflection by the sisters captivating. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Beautiful. Simply Beautiful

That was a nice love story, with just enough drama as well. 5* storytelling. And Dad gets to visit the Isle of Man? Cool!

It was my first exposure to your work. As a wordsmith you know what you're doing and rarely if ever do you do violence to the English language. On top of that solid foundation you have created a set of engaging characters that I came to care deeply about. A very nicely developed and well paced narrative. 5 stars!

A most loving, wonderful, enjoyable story I have read in quite a while. A beautiful ending and a wonderful happily ever after. Definitely a one handkerchief, or maybe two. Thanks for sharing.

You've got the touch.

I'm glad that I tend to follow you through the categories, as this was a great story. Touching and realistic. I'm always happy to see a new CG story, please keep posting.

More like this please!

Good story and you weave a nice tale. My only issue is, like most stories on this site, is the cliches. Did Jax really have to ride a bike? Did we really have to have one gorgeous goddess and one masculine chick, that had no curves or womanly features? I know there are 'formulas' to stories, but these little details get boring when they are always the same. I wasn't expecting some blue haired hippie or butch dude chick, but couldn't we get something different for once? Once I read she rode I bike I pretty much knew where it was headed. Maybe I've read too many stories, but sometimes it's nice to be surprised by where things go.

@anonymous: "Good story." Is there something wrong with a woman who rides a bike? Sounds like you have issues with reading. Where is the "masculine" chick with no curves or womanly features? I believe both are described as beautiful, and the "no curves" thing was when Jackie was a juvenile. You sound like the one assigning "cliches" and "formulas," not this writer. I have read thousands of stories here, and never read one like this. How is it a surprise that "CAGIVA-gurl" would write a story about a woman who rides a bike?

Sometimes, a motorcycle is just a motorcycle...

It's not a metaphor, it's not a rhetorical device, it's just a motorcycle.

Anybody who reads y stories will notice they pop up all over the place. Why? Because I love them...

Such a great storey, I enjoyed it especially because of the places I’m familiar with and riding bikes, forget the critics below you are a gifted writer. More stories like this please and with the NZ connection. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

wonderfully warm and compassionate story, I love it . With the warmest greetings

Anita71

Fantastic, loved it. Your back👍👍👍

Which Shadow was it? 1200, 750 ACE, 1100, 800?

I did not see the final twist, of the two women both moving back to Te Awamutu, but it did bring a lovely closure to the damaged relationship between them and their parents.

Thanks for another delightful story, Cagivagurl.

Damn lovely story...

You write, so the people in the story comes alive...

OMG... I just love it..

Love, Belinda

Wow, what a tale, amazingly good writing! I can see some issues unresolved (Jacky's need for solitude now and then, Lucy's jealousy) but the end has a lot of signs that these will be solved going forward.

Will you take me for a ride on your bike

Your stories make me so emotional .Great writting

Thank you

Just another feel good romantic sexy story of love.

Just what I love.

Thank you

A warm story … with a bit of an odd ending.

It felt to me like you were trying to make an across the board happily ever after ending.

But it didn't quite work for me … because it was just too easy. Your characters both had serious issues, almost none of which were resolved in the end. I can't quite see how everyone giving up everything and starting over in the podunk town the grew up in resolves more than Jackie's one need to "repay" her foster parents. Lucy's insecurity and crazy jealousy is still there. Jackie's solitary life is still there. Her unresolved feelings about being gay are still there. Not to mention that her entire life is in Auckland, especially her business; she certainly can't move that to Podunk NZ and expect to sell much of anything. Would she really be willing to shrink the large life she seemed to have in Auckland down to just three people in the town she grew up in?

The characters were marvelous; I loved them both. But it is almost always the case, the more complex the characters, the more complex the ending must be for a closed (resolved) ending. That's why so few writers attempt a closed ending on a complex story; it's too hard (and usually too artificial).

I, too, am guilty of pursuing the closed ending when such an ending won't work. But I resist …

But don't worry, that's exactly where sequels come from!

It feels al just natural, the fall outs or the hights coming back together, the road trips the screaming or kissing …… and as it had been mentioned by many others before in comments, your details in describing the NZ culture the Maoris and the country ….. im following your moto bikes rides on google maps and some are truly spectacular really similar to the alps

So ten hearts for another enchanting romance 💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝✨✨✨✨✨✨✨✨🏍️🏍️

I loved this story. I wish it was possible to give you ten stars. Why does love have to be so elusive?

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Second time reading this; so much more exquisite as I could focus more on the nuances of the embedded pain one can get from hard times and how that tends to get projected into future relationships and one's sense of identity. Working through those can be even more painful, if not earth-shaking, often over mis-perceived slights that act as triggers for that deeper pain. Great story of two sisters/girls working that out to find the deep love that was always there, just hidden. And Mrs. B. was a perceptive angel, as so many mothers are, blood or no. Glad that Mr. B's deeper side was brought out too, in his own way. Many tears again shed for good reasons.

Dang, great story! Love can win! Effort, giving, and caring can make a lasting relationship! Over 47 yrs for my wife and I. Thank you for a well thought out and meaningful story!!

As it stands, I can honestlynsay that their relationship is throwing up so many red flags its not even funny. Its romantic, and they're clearly working on their issues, but the story ends before any of them are truly resolved. They are simply glossed over in the name of a happily ever after ending. It might work on paper as a romantic story, but in real life, between Jax's independence and Luce's uncontrollable jealousy, and combined with their mutual need not to break up the family they have with the Browns, I can only come up with one word to describe their relationship.... Toxic