All Comments on 'Jack's Return'

A really neat story of a man being a real man, caring to bring a young girl to love, quietly and lovingly FULL MARKS

An arousing and gently erotic story. I especially appreciated the believable timelines of the story. If the author had Jack meet and bed the girl in one or two meetings, the realism that was developed by taking months not days to comsumate the relstionship would have been lost along with the true eroticism of the piece.

Two comments: how did he get his clothes off for their first time? Did you skip that? Second: you said she was lying prone, but from the description, she is on her back. That is supine. Prone is lying on one's stomach. Maybe a small point but now you know and won't make that mistake again. Otherwise, good story.

Nice to read something like this from time to time. Good job, and as someone else said, I appreciate that you didn't rush them into bed, nor did you make an inexperienced woman suddenly knowledgeable when they got to the bedroom.

Well worth the "5" I gave you and hope you write more often in the future and I do look forward to waiting to reading your next story.! Thx. JAG