All Comments on 'Jane's Licking'

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Captain_FapulusCaptain_Fapulusover 8 years ago
Still good but...

Compared to your usual J&J level and previous spin-off this was rather disappointing. It was merely a stating of affairs from a different point of view and lacked the emotions, the expansive backstory, the real human connection and the usual charisma of your sorties. To be honest it felt more like copy-paste of J&J Ch. 10 with a few small editions that didn't bring much to the whole story.

What it did establish is that J&J now have a new set of friends that seems to fit well into their lives and a legal marriage.

One more observation - you said that the boy has a half-sister so I assume you plan on making them part of the future story where they grow up close to each other like Amy and J&J did, and not hide the fact that Jake is the father. It's a rather nice idea so I hope you invest some thought into that.

As much as wanted I couldn't give you more than 4*, the disappointment was imply too big.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Weird story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Could have been hotter...

... if Jake had only agreed on the condition that he was allowed to inseminate Melissa naturally. Jane was jealous of course, but eventually they agreed reluctantly. Melissa was nervous, she had never had a man inside her before and didn't really know what to do. So she had a talk with Jessica who told her not to worry, Jake would do most of the work, and gave her a few tips about what he liked. They agreed that Jane and Jessica would watch, and maybe lend a helping hand...

hadrupriderhadrupriderover 8 years ago
Alternative version continued...

Melissa's cycle was quite regular so they could work out when was the best time and they booked a long weekend together at a hotel in the country. Jake wasn't allowed to come for a week beforehand - whenever he made a move on Jessica she told him to save it for Melissa. She rather enjoyed teasing him in this way, and like the idea of providing a service for the two lesbians. Melissa and Jane didn't usually use dildos, preferring fingers and tongues, but bought a realistic life-sized one and used it regularly in Melissa so she could get used to how it felt.

By the time the day arrived, Jake was getting desperate and was hard almost all the time. Melissa had a few drinks to get herself relaxed, then Jane started to warm her up, getting her ready for Jake. She slowly undressed her on a bed, opened her thighs and licked her, dipping her tongue into her pussy until it was very wet with Janes saliva and Melissa's own juice, but not letting her come.

hadrupriderhadrupriderover 8 years ago
... alternative version concluded.

Thanks to Jane's licking, Melissa was now as ready as she would ever be for a man's penis. Jane called Jake and Jessica's room and seconds later Jake came bursting through the door with a huge bulge in his pants, followed closely by his sister. He groaned with pleasure at the sight of the beautiful naked blonde on the bed, her knees up and apart, her pussy swollen and glistening. He quickly released his cock, knelt on the bed and pushed his tip against Melissa's wet slit, sliding easily into her. It had been years since he had entered any woman other than his sister, and hehadn't had sex for a week, so the novel intense sensations made him lose control and with a roar, he thrust all the way in and started to come, pumping streams of hot sperm deep inside Melissa's cunt. She felt him flexing and pumping inside her, surprised at the intensity and power of his orgasm.

Over the weekend they did it again and again, the three women using all their skills coax as much sperm as possible out of Jake's balls as possible, Jessica holding, stroking and massaging her brother's testicles while Jessica learnt to stimulate his prostate gland to make him come, and played with Melissa's clit to try to make her cliimax just as Jake was ejaculating into her. At the end of the weekend Jake was completely drained and exhausted, and Melissa was a bit sore - but she was pregnant.

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